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    dots Submission Name: Lost regretdots

    Author: RandiKae
    ASL Info:    17/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 125/138/34
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsLost regretdots

    It shadows her face,
    It darkens her soul,
    this feeling she has,
    she begs it to go.

    Endless searching,
    inside the depths,
    continous agony,
    failing to retrace the steps.

    She hates what shes become
    everything she is
    bitter, incompetent, fake.
    Why not internal bliss?

    "I hate you!"
    she screams at the mirror,
    but it wont help,
    because nobody hears her.

    "Whats wrong with me?"
    the question is just
    "Why does my hatered
    have such a lust?"

    Lost within a world of doom
    she stands alone,
    listening to the voice
    speaking in hushed tones.

    From outside her world
    light floods in
    "Pull up now,
    While you still can."

    The hand reaches down,
    but she refuses the grip.
    Why get out now,
    when you can seize to exsist?

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      I remember this phase. You either want to just lay down and die, or move on and be fine. You just get tired of the world and of the bull[censored], and either way you want it to end. If you choose you try to make everything fine, getting there seems like getting across the ocean without a boat. But the change comes subtly. One day you'l be sitting there, feeling those familiar emotions and then it will hit you. The things that used to beat your mind into depression just won't phase you. The walls of the closet imprisoning you will no longer be suffocating you. You'll sit there for a little bit, marveling the change, and then you'll open the door and walk out. And that will be the end.
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by Raistlin Sith | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i cannot believe you dont like this i loved it its filled with such raw emotion and its so real... i can relate, i love the rythm and rhyme however in some places i found it doesnt flow quite as well as it does in others, nevertheless its great... good job!
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
      God i love the poem it showes great emotion although i dont understand why you would feel fake or anything? your a very good person, weard at times but that is what makes you, you. dont forget that im here and i care about you.

    InYuco Katan
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by InYuco Katan | [ Reply to This ]
      it seems like a hiddden thought dwells in ur mind the much hatred u put upon urself reminds me of myself keep it up the tiny flashlite u hold in ur week brittle hands can guide u out of ur darkness u just need a stronger battery<< if u kno what i mean thanx
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by Darkwarrior | [ Reply to This ]
      i think this poem shows some serious emotion that you truly needed to vent in a creative way. i hust have 1 question, is this a true story? anyways, i loved the lines
    Lost within a world of doom
    she stands alone
    i can actually realte to those very well because that is sometimes what my life feels like!
    thanks for the great poem!
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by liliana1987 | [ Reply to This ]

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