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    dots Submission Name: Love Breeds Vulnerabilitydots
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    Author: secretdream0
    ASL Info:    21/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 48/46/22
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1024
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    dotsLove Breeds Vulnerabilitydots
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    Sitting on the floor,
    Shoulders heaving with the sobs,
    Eyes swollen shut,
    She aches for him.

    Longing for his touches,
    The passion of his words,
    The tenderness of his presence,
    She aches for him.

    She no longer feels happy,
    Careless and free,
    She harbors feelings of desire
    As she aches for him.

    Her defenses are down,
    Everything effects her,
    Alone and scared
    She aches for him.

    Hes everything to her,
    The core of her soul,
    The center of her universe,
    She aches for him.

    Everyday the ache grows,
    Overtime shes learned a lesson,
    Love breeds vulnerability,
    Yet she aches for him




    Submitted on 2005-04-12 11:02:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was cool...I like the style you put this into as well as the content of the poem...you put this common feeling into a really nice poem.

    Love breeds vulnerability,
    Yet she aches for him

    This was my favorite line...I think that the title was good as well.
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, this is awesome. Very emotional and pleasing to readers who are looking for this kind of write. It is very true that love makes one vulnerable...Great job

    Desser
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by Desser | [ Reply to This ]


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