She sits within a hollow tree
Watching the snow
Fall gently from within
Like a wave of
White feathers adrift in the air.
The illuminated snow
In the pale light of the moon
Who’s face gazed upon
the earth tranquilly
Wow. This was great for being written in 60 seconds. I dont think I could have done it in 60 minutes. Your metaphors were excellent. White feathers (brilliant) The imagery puts you right in there. Carol
I loved this piece & I'm glad it's not gone in 60 seconds!
This reminded me instantly after the first line of a native princess sitting in a large, hollow redwood tree or some other large tree - looking out at the fresh and divine landscape! I do word-a-day but I'll have to check this one out too! Love, Peace, Joy!
Nice i really like it , i enjoyed the metaophors the obvious thought you put into this and also it is said things writtin on pure emotion are often greats so in my opinion its perfect a great read , very genuine by the way i'm No Talent check out some of my work sometime and let me kno what ya think aight
I like this this crisp clean telling small verse. Your imagery is exceptional for instance ... "The illuminated snow winked serenely". This poem was extremley short not to be in a haiku/senyru format but works like one so clear and chaste to the point. Good write. `always poetry, Cheryl.
NOt bad for 60 seconds. You were able to put a lot of imagery in such a short write. And you took a word that most people think of a depressing and turned it into a positive writing. You didnt try to write about the word hallow...you just used it as another part in a nice and eloquent piece. Well done.