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    dots Submission Name: Passiondots

    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 455
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 766
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       i wrote this very long ago for my boyfriend at the time we wanted to b together but noone seemed to except this so tell me how it makes u feel

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    Are eyes crossed the path of passion.
    are hands slid upon the pavement of everlasting, and our heart heard the calling so frequent but fading.
    it was unbearable.
    pulling our magnetic forces
    incoherent, unplanned
    and well out for the both of us.
    things happen
    for a reason
    many say
    for a meaning
    no one really acknowledges
    for the future
    no one really sees.
    but all our afraid of
    like a bird
    in the morning breeze
    with fog hiding
    its enemies.
    but with arm in arm
    we can get through.
    working together
    is what is true.
    in the meaningful
    that all are fearing
    but ever waiting
    and nearing upon us.
    we can get through
    the fog.
    the hurtful expressions
    of this world's past
    is at its last.
    so learn this lesson
    the words
    spoken by one
    are mere opinions
    and the truth
    is inside
    knows this
    but are locking
    it out
    for fear of
    of keeping
    it forever
    locked up
    in their heart.
    with all the
    deep secrets
    wanting, yearning
    to get out
    and break
    the ice,
    the barrier
    put up.
    by their owner
    like a slave
    with no water
    and yearning
    for the load
    to be laid upon another
    to weight out
    the weight it feels
    like stones
    in the goal that is
    all feel it.
    we feel it.
    but are mouths
    stay shut.
    for the fear
    we have
    everyone haves
    of letting go
    and giving up.
    but we will never
    and our past
    may be fearful also
    but the future
    is our hope
    and working
    we can get
    through it
    and lift
    the stone
    upon us.
    stopping us
    from our hopes
    and dreams
    us and only us
    can plan
    our future
    and the things that happen
    in our future.
    not this stone
    of a world
    that will
    never let
    us free.
    to fight our
    own battles
    ride our
    own journies
    pay our
    own debts
    and speak only
    our truths
    our trueness
    not the opinion
    of others
    not the opinion
    of this world
    chained and thirsty
    for our freedom.
    with time and teamwork
    we can find the key
    break the lock
    and free ourselves
    of secrets
    this world's past
    and ours.
    and the hope
    of us
    will show through
    like sunshine
    after a summer's rain
    or a winter's blizzard
    the warmth of our hearts
    will heat up the cold
    and keep us
    away from
    the hurt
    that we may feel
    the sadness
    we'll have
    to deal with
    all in one kiss
    my mind
    speaks this

    Submitted on 2005-04-12 12:08:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I loved what you had to say here but in this format, for me, it was difficult to follow, only for it's length- I like the highlighting of certain words too for effect!
    Isn't it funny how in Love, everyone wants to get involved ~ like they have the right? How did finding this make you feel? Love, Peace, Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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