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Blessed is the Magnolia


Author: marysunshine
ASL Info:    34, Female,
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Words: 77
Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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The Magnolia trees are in bloom...smile.


Blessed is the Magnolia



Blessed is the day
the magnolia tree blooms,
and the hummingbird starts suckling
the flower.

Happy is the lady
singing ditties in the grass,
while she smells the fragrant blossoms
from above.

Playful are the children
as they climb to pluck the lovely,
from the branches out of reach
from chubby hands.

Never with a tear
can I see and smell magnolias,
for they charm the earth to giggles
in the spring.




Submitted on 2005-04-12 13:02:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "Earth laughs in flowers", said Emerson - and youve voiced that laugh here... An image of love, laughter and joy carried across in this delicate piece so well... *sigh*

Its the first of your works that I've read - and its incredibly simple, elegant and somehow slightly poignant - just like the magnolia flower...

Thank you, for putting a smile on my face :)

All the best,

Katia
| Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by Katia | [ Reply to This ]
  Well you've written a perfect poem here, and made me hit, what, my fourth fave for your work? Amazing. Wouldn't alter a word. Nothing but praise and lame exhortations of "schoolhouse rock" phraseology. Hallelujah! Hallelujah! Hallelujahaaahhhyeaaaahhh!
| Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by Vancrown | [ Reply to This ]
  We take magnolias very seriously in the South. I think they're really beautiful. I think that's the sign that spring is truly here when they bloom. They make me sneeze, but I love them. The blooms are divine.

I like how you wrote this. It's a clever approach to write these little vignettes.
| Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
  this is very sweet (ooo, a pun!). simple and brimming with the beauty of spring. i've been noticing nature all around me lately and being so inspired. i like the simplicity of this. thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
  and you are a magnolia, and you are spring and you make me smile. Blessed are those that can be considered friends of marysunshine, for she always brings light and warmth.

Oh, and the poem is equally as pretty. Thanks. Been no secret I've been a little down and something like this brings me back to my center.
| Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by deadndreaming | [ Reply to This ]
  I enjoyed this piece Marianne- of course, what initially caught my eye was the title. Magnolia's are close to my heart for many reasons. You are a fellow lover of nature as well and I know that you will stir these feelings in me when I come to visit your page. Hope you are well.
| Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by Magnolia | [ Reply to This ]
  What a nice poem, it is so appropiate for the season. The whole thing really make me want to get outside and walk in the sun. While some of the lines seem out of place the whole cheerful idea of the poem makes me forget about them. Good STUFF!

-Akai-
| Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by Akai_oni | [ Reply to This ]
  Sweet, well expressed sentiments from someone who will always know her glass is at least half full.
Thanks for sharing the upbeat with me.
Dave
| Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm all for this one. Four simple, joyous vignettes, all linked together in a family-picture frame, one that can only bring smiles. Very touching, and no, I can't not smile. Thanks for sharing.
bent
| Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by bent | [ Reply to This ]


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