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My Rose

Author: thesacredone
ASL Info:    18/F/BK
Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 139 /159 /50
Words: 57
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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My Rose

Like rue is for grace,
Or violet for thought,
You are my rose
For love that was lost.

As a desert is dry,
As a knife is sharp,
You are my light,
To be led through the dark.

I cherish you deeply
For all that I know,
Like remembering rosemary,
You are my rose.

Submitted on 2005-04-12 16:38:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Short but they say. I love the rhyme scheme. I am a bit let down; however, not because of a mistake you made (which I found none). I am only bothered that it was so short. It is so well written that I can't help but to want to read more of it, while there is no more to it. "Like rue is for grace-Like violet for thought-You are my rose-For love that was lost." I love the expressive symbolism you use here, and throughout the whole poem. This is an awesome poem babe, keep it up!
| Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by Samuel Bielz | [ Reply to This ]

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