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    dots Submission Name: Herdots
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    Author: Di Re Rakord
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 130/125/30
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I made this for the woman I love, and it seems the only one i will ever love. Tell me what you think.


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    Silent sighs and starry skies
    Everyday Iím forced to feel this pain
    Climatic cries and then it dies
    Her presence keeps me sane

    All the time, itís such a crime
    How is it Iím so alone?
    Those eyes, divine, always gazing into mine
    With you I feel at home

    Tiffany youíre an epiphany, yet more wondrous still
    Your face sublime like this never ending time
    A smile so angelic it could make one kill
    Your presence so compelling, id do anything to make you mine




    Submitted on 2005-04-12 19:10:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Silent sighs and starry skies.... started out like a poem that was going to make me sigh at the end, I don't know if you said what I think you were going for at the begining.
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is extremely good, it flows really well and i love the language you use its so beautiful, i would kill to have someone write something like this for me... you should show her if you havent already! great job
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
      I like because i feel the same way all the time. Silent sighs and starry skies
    Everyday Iím forced to feel this pain
    Climatic cries and then it dies
    Her presence keeps me sane was my favorite part. It seemed so descriptive of how you felt and made me feel every emotion



    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by Redman12333 | [ Reply to This ]


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