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    dots Submission Name: "Mr. America 2005"dots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1352
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1563



    Description:
       I am the newly crowned Mr. America and I will do my best to uphold the integrity of such a prestigeous award. And I will replace world hunger with world peace.
    L.t


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    dots"Mr. America 2005"dots
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    He loves how he lives.
    Delicate and sensitive.
    Itís just who he is.
    Heís not making excuses.
    But feels itís just useless
    To label something that everyone chooses

    For he lives life with a hard on.
    Welcomes opportunity
    But is grateful when the window is gone.
    Heís in touch with his emotion.
    Yet itís also what he runs from.
    Iíve seen him cry.
    He thinks no one wants him to succeed.
    So why should he bother to try?

    Friendly and giving.
    An overall good human being.
    Often heís too direct.
    He never said he was perfect.
    Heís simple yet complex.
    Heís just like you;
    But refuses to be like the rest.
    Heís not exactly a people person.
    He just prefers when theyíre
    not around as often.

    One of a kind.
    A master in his own mind.
    Confused and often feels let down.
    By the world and the things in it,
    That seem to just spin around.
    Iíve heard him say before;
    Heís looking for something more.
    Something different.
    Maybe just someone to listen.
    He wants to feed the world;
    With food and information.
    Easing their hollow stomachs and troubled minds.
    Bringing less aggravation.
    Iím glad heís on our side;
    Ladies and gentlemen I give you (LameMansTerms)
    Mr. America 2005.

    lamemansterm$




    Submitted on 2005-04-12 20:27:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, this is pretty unique. I liek it strangely. It's egotistic but not senile, your overly confident but for the right reasons. I also noticed a hint of unfulfilled ambition like I mentioned in some other comments, I think it was in the comment on "DRUGS" you're searching, I can feel it in your mannerism. The answer is out there and I think you know it, just as I do, but I won't push it toward you, or you to it, it's always going to be your decision but from what you told me about your childhood I feel you were strongly misled. I know of a different God, who knows no faults we place within our own understanding (if that makes sense, I mean we create our own doubt/problems). About the poem specifically the rhyme was awesome becuase I don't think I saw any exact rhymes which made it much more complex, great write in that regard. I wish you all thebest in your attempts to solve world hunger, and who knows maybe you can take arnolds job as governor someday, atleast you're american. lol :p
    Take Care,
    -Tom
    | Posted on 2005-05-11 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      Mike, this is a unique thought. When I saw the title and read the description I was expecting it to be written as if you were giving your acceptance speech or answering one of those ridiculous questions from the judges...we all know the questions mean squat, they are just rating you on the size of that hard-on. I like what you have, but I think you could really make it funny and unique by changing the tense to make it like you are he speaking to the audience. That is just my stupid suggestion for the day. I just think it is a creative idea and you of all people could succeed at going that extra step. Much love as always...Mags
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by Magnolia | [ Reply to This ]
      it seems like you submitt two or three new writtings a day (jk) anyway this i liked. I disagree with deepinthoughts comment though, i don't feel like "cute" is a good way to describe this or anything that you write.

    You do, however, alsways seem to come up with creative ways of saying things that we all hear so much already. who voted you Mr. America anyway.

    Iíve seen him cry.
    He thinks no one wants him to succeed.
    So why should he bother to try?

    Without a doubt my favorite lines. This is probalbly the most mature and well written thing i've read from you. It's like reading everything new that you write is allowing me to, in a very relative since, watch you evolve into something (what, i don't know).

    I think i remember reading you mention something about some of your friends saying that you've kinda changed and not understanding why you write so much or whatever. Maybe you have kinda changed. Like growth or something.

    Spoken
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by spoken | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this piece a lot. I think that it was very creatively written, and you still amaze me every time you write. I keep expecting you to run out of great writings..but they still come and come..good job..
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I really like this. you are such a great writer. God really blessed you..you are so lucky, you have no idea..i want to be just like you when i grow up..lol.
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]
      This is cute; I liked it. The rhyming was off in some places, but didn't detract from the poem.
    Favorite line:

    For he lives life with a hard on.
    Welcomes opportunity

    A very unique way to say that he meets life with all he has. Good write!
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by deepinthought | [ Reply to This ]


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