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    dots Submission Name: Falling Apartdots
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    Author: JGo
    ASL Info:    20/F/GA
    Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 98/132/42
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 363
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 762



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    dotsFalling Apartdots
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    You avert your eyes,
    Avoiding my attention.
    I try to help but,
    You respond with agression.
    I dont understand that,
    And i watch as you tremble.
    The cut on your wrists,
    Like mine resemble.
    The pain that you feel,
    Brought to the surface
    With a hidden meaning
    As well as a purpose
    Your eyes; they speak
    Without your mind knowing,
    They hint, and reveal
    The feelings you're not showing.
    To me you are beautiful,
    Trust me you are.
    But i cant just say it,
    Because it seems so far,
    From the tip of my tongue,
    But not from my heart
    The more time I spend with you,
    The more that i just fall apart.




    Submitted on 2005-04-12 21:05:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked this poem, the rhyming was great and i could really get into the cutting part, not because i relate, but because it is a problem w/ teens. i liked this becuase it brought to me how when you love someone, and they seem to always find a way to slip out of your fingers. good job, keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by darkchild_41 | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem was the perfect expression of beauty in pain to me... I was blown away by your artful words that so easily captured my heart and made it their own. I feel as though I should thank you for letting me read this poem. So I shall ... Thank you amor, Thank you.
    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by PoetryQueen | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i think this is really good and really deep and i can definately say i relate... i really like the language you used and the picture that this poem paints... honestly i really like it, well done.
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]



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