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    dots Submission Name: Mommy Where is Daddy?dots
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    Author: deepinthought
    ASL Info:    24, F, Shaw AFB, SC
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 72/96/19
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 313
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 527



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       This is the conversation with my daughter that I most fear....


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    dotsMommy Where is Daddy?dots
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    Mommy, where is Daddy?
    He’s off to war my dear.
    When will he back back?
    Not soon enough I fear.

    Mommy where is Daddy?
    Keeping our country safe
    When will he be back?
    Soon, my dear, if you have faith.

    Mommy, where is Daddy?
    Child, they don’t know.
    When will he be back?
    My child, I don’t know.

    Mommy, where is Daddy?
    He’s with the angels now.
    When will he be back?
    He won’t my dear, he won’t.




    Submitted on 2005-04-13 00:36:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem was really good. It really fits whats going on in world at this time. I think I can tell you are a firm beliver in world peace as am i. Keep writing and thanks for the compliment on my poem.
    -Marisa
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by Marisa | [ Reply to This ]
      Though most shun repitition ...this piece does it justice...I have nothing to note that needs change or work...it was a beautiful story...one that I hope for you and your daughter has a different ending...
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really sad and I know how you feel, my mom's over there right now and I hope I never have to tell my younger siblings that. Hope your husband is doing alright and great job on writing this.
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is a very sad poem. I really didnt expect to much from it, by the title. But im amazed. I hope everything works out ok for you.
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by poeticeyes | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, you think about stuff other then sex. This really moved me. I have a ton of friends out there and I know that it will affect not only their families, but all the alumni in my high school in general (military school) if something would happened to them. I will admit when I first saw the title it was going to be about something else; excellent moving poem.
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by Snowball_24 | [ Reply to This ]



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