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    dots Submission Name: Snowballdots

    Author: Patricio
    Elite Ratio:    3.75 - 31/33/7
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       i kinda write poems in twos i dont know why
    but any way i would like to state that i have never thrown one of those snowballs that i was talking about i just thought it was funny i swear

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    Kids are weird

    Remember when we were kids we always had fun
    Any stick was a sword every finger a gun
    We always had some great hero games
    Out saving distressed damsels and dames

    And we did other things that were crazier still
    Things that would make any grown man quite ill
    Remember how we ate all that crazy weird stuff?
    It seemed like one booger was never enough

    And when it snowed out, it was always real nice
    We tried to see who could sign his name twice
    And if we couldnít, run one and run all!!
    Because here comes flying a great yellow snow ball.


    No mother, no, it couldnít be true
    I wasnít the one who threw the snowball at you
    I swear I swear I could do no such thing
    Iím the nice one, no harm could I bring
    You are my favorite mother you know
    At you no snowball could I ever throw
    It was that one boy with those shifty weird eyes
    He is really, really mean and tells all those harsh lies
    O what, you saw me throw the snow ball
    Ok Iíll go take a time out in the hall

    Submitted on 2005-04-13 00:54:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      G'day, I'm sorry that I didnt understand the transition from the first part to the second, It seemed like two totally seperate porms to me. Sorry to be negative, but I really liked the first half, and I thought the secong half let it down
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really funny, made me miss my childhood though.. *sniffle then looks around and throws a snowball at you and runs away laughing her head off*
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]

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