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THANK YOU


Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
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Words: 148
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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THANK YOU



Let me take the time
to say
Thank you.
For teaching me
the path to take
THANK YOU.
For showing me
just what's at stake.
THAnK YOU
For letting me see
my strenghts, my flaws.
Thank you.
for helping me learn all the laws.
I've learned to give, and still hold back
spread my wings, and stay on track.
smile and flirt. and keep my shirt.
I'll dance and play, and have what I need.
I no longer crave your weed.
My flowers bloom
my back is straight
i fit that dress,
since I lost the weight.
I guard my secrets and keep my heart
for that you've played a crucial part.
I appreciate the time you spent
the days that spun into years
with nothing to show
but my need to tell you this.
Thank you.
Thank you.
THANK YOU.




Submitted on 2005-04-13 01:25:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  that was a really good poem for one that rymes a lot ( i really don't like poems that rhyme) but i really liked this one. i mean it had really really good flow and i think i could realte but i mean i think you should keep writing and give me a post when you come ou t with another one... THNX

- Nammy
| Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by Namlooc20 | [ Reply to This ]
  Chh. Yeah. If I said whateveryone else was saying-boy. Wouldn't it get repetitive? But this poem really is a nice one... I mean, it's not often that you see something not based on death. O_O;
^thats a lie
Ah. Yea. I like it.
This well.
It's not-
a common...subject, eh. Yea.
| Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
  I wonder what inspired you because this is truly a lovely poem, your words flow from the heart and can be applied so well for a mother with the selfless care who gives the gift of life. It was stated in simple words but well expressed. But with the last line you told it all that was more than enough.
| Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by Bang | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi this is indeed a very nice and sweet poem. It is so simple and that makes it unique. It is always important to thank others for their commitment towards us. Unfortunately we sometimes forget doing so. It is nice to read a poem which is about such a subject. The wording was good and it had flow.
It has a very clear message
Let me take the time
to say
Thank you.
These are my favourite line. A very special way to say thank you. Well done with love shabnam
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| Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]
  this is cute.i good way to say thank you.i was kinda wondering why you capitalized some of the thank yous but not all of them,eh what ever ,prolly not importent.well i liked it.

?dreamer?
| Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by dreamer | [ Reply to This ]


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