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    dots Submission Name: TEEN SCHOOL DAYSdots
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    Author: xtremegentleman
    ASL Info:    22/m/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 595/778/82
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsTEEN SCHOOL DAYSdots
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    The sixth grade crushes, the seventh grade blushes
    That eight grade kiss that affirmed that lips were luscious
    Making out in the halls in those high school years
    Go home freshman was the phrase the upperclassmen would cheer

    You had your first long relationship by the tenth grade
    Thought it was love but really you just went through a phase
    Someone you knew from school died when you were a Junior
    The same year that you started hearing your name in rumors

    You had a whole new outlook, you changed your demeanor
    Really started growing up when you were labeled a Senior
    Met your high school sweetheart, your date to the prom
    Made love for the first time when you were that young

    Remember how you felt when you first drove to school
    Swore you was cool, hated cafeteria food
    The first time you had an argument over a guy
    You rolled your eyes at that girl everytime she walked by

    Remember Senior Skip Day...whole class at the beach
    The lunch-time hangout, Early Release
    That one teacher that you hated, locker that you unpacked
    Last day, graduation--still you want to go back.




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      wow that was seriously good. Although I am a total goody goody girl at my school. I have a lot of friends and I can relate. Great write! Don't change a thing!
    | Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by Pursuitoflife | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so great! I love it, although I sorta disagree-I have no wish to return to high school. I can't really offer constructive criticism, either, cause it's just great the way it is.
    :3
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by Ajyra | [ Reply to This ]
      Love it love it love it, yes this has such a common thread which all teenagers felt in high school. As for me, Omg was I ever so shy in school, though I had many girls wanting to date me,but i was way to shy,lol Now today I am so far from being shy.

    Great write
    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah, i'm a sophmore now, but some of this stuff is kinda true (especially about the first long relationship, though mine was when i was a freshman). i'm wondering if in a couple of years i'll be feeling this way abouy my school...
    | Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. nice. in high school. nice to know u have a good outlook. thats refreshing. cause i hate high school. rumors make and break friendships no joke. lol. but very good and i like it. someone close does die every year. it hurts but u grow.
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by dancer06 | [ Reply to This ]
      dang you st8 took me back to my wild out days lol
    only this is the type of highschool life I would have liked to have had...

    I only went to one prom. never got to do senior skip day...I was too busy being a single mama.

    My first friend was murdered my 8th grade year...

    but still... I swear I could smell the bomb fire smoke, hear the oldies playing in the background *let's just kiss...and say goodbye* hear my homeboys arguing about who's turn for a shot it was...ahhhh *sigh* my good old days...
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      I USED TO LOOOOVEEE CAFETERIA FOOD BOY!

    The pizza was off the ricta! mmmmmm...mmmmm...mmmmmmm

    I was the bytch of the whole school. That's something to be proud of isn't it? Right? LMFAO My theme song for my high school years was "Ambitionz of a Rider" by Tupac.

    *sings*

    I won't deny it...I'm a straight rida...you don't wanna fck wit me...got the principal fckin wit me...but they can't do nothin to LI LI...

    UH OH!

    LMFAO

    This was great. Loved my high school years. Even during the worst parts.

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was great. I really liked the whole poem. *Wishing i can be as talented as you one day* Anyhoo. I"m in school right now, and I'm being told don't wish it away becasue it will be the best days of your life when you are older. Live everyday ask it is given to you. I'm in the 8th grade right now. Had arguments with other girls about boys, of couse crushes and kisses. There is so much more to look forward to in the years ahead for me. Like as you said driving to school having an auctual long lasting relationship. and meeting my highschool sweetheart. I think this is such a cute poem and nice to read.

    Much love to ya,
    Mikki
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      The only thing I didn't like was the rhythm of the words. It seemed like they weren't put together as well as they could be at times.

    Like the last line of the first stanza, it just doesn't seem to fit when you say it aloud.

    Other than that, good write. I'm still in highschool and my experience hasn't been quite like that but still cool to see someone's reflection on the years in class.
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by The Wolverine | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh yes, the school daze! I reminisced of my own crazy days @ school and had to smile ; > } I too remember Senior Skip day but we usually used that more than 1X a year and it started when I was a freshman! he he he BAD Girl!
    Your piece flows well and I appreciate the content! Thanks for the trip down memory lane...Love, Peace, Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      i just wrote about my 10 yr reunion in my journal...and i DONT want to go! agggghhhhh...its frustrating.

    i did like this though. it brought back the fun memories...
    -Nikki
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahh! I'm in high school right now. That is so cool. The rhyming was off, but thatr makes it a little better. Oh, and I'm not a Junior, and someone died last year. This is so cool. To see it from another point of view is really intriguing. Thanks for sharing! I'm really liking your poetry...
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by Areinaka | [ Reply to This ]


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