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    dots Submission Name: Trippingdots
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    Author: C. Starr
    ASL Info:    35/yesplz/State of denial
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 130/196/68
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 928
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Written in 1995 in my friend Jay's apartment, while tripping. (Duh!)


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    dotsTrippingdots
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    Mystical memories.......
    That I swear I saw first in my dreams.
    The ceiling is breathing.....
    with bright green messages of anarchy.
    Purple paisley is painted on my brain,
    Ah..ha..ha...I think I'm going insane.
    Orange starbursts...flying from my fingertips.
    It's outta sight man...stare at the lights,
    Flashing, pulsing in our eyes.
    This room is too my small for all my surroundings.
    And so it seems...I've seen all these crazy things somewhere before.
    Lets leave...I don't care where we go, let's just leave.
    But wait....I can't find the door.




    Submitted on 2005-04-14 03:59:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yep, sounds like a trip alright. Lifes realities under a microscope. Thanks for your comment and yes I liked this one as you assumed.

    I liked the words you used and how you metion wanting to go anywhere.

    Good work, keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-04-18 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      Lol, love the orange starburst :) Very unique style...it's always fun to see what comes out of chemically altered poetry :)

    good job
    Stw
    | Posted on 2005-04-16 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      this is rather humorous...although it sounds kinda serious.
    i won't really say what is bothering me in tha poem cause i won't really consider it to be tha but more like something you wrote remembering it. i'd say it's rather the thoughts u had.
    but i cannot say that i haven't enjoyed it cause i did...it was well written...ur own thought came out smoothly and you just said what you wanted to say... i liked that.
    well done.
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]


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