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    Author: xtremegentleman
    ASL Info:    22/m/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 595/778/82
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       LOVE is..........

    Inspired by Corinthians 13th Chapter


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    LOVE is patient,
    LOVE is kind
    LOVE is candlelight
    a diamond ring
    and red wine

    LOVE is blind
    to the physical realm
    LOVE is still ever present
    through the crippling of limbs

    because LOVE is real
    despite the ups and the downs
    a man may choose to just walk out
    but the LOVE sticks around

    LOVE is sound
    and rather sure of itself
    LOVE always keeps its promises
    through sickness and health

    and when LOVE is felt
    it is the greatest of things
    disagreements will arise
    but LOVE stands in between

    for LOVE is keen
    what understanding it brings
    for when one feels like giving up
    LOVE intervenes




    Submitted on 2005-04-14 13:35:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oooh my this is such an influential piece...I needed to hear something this deep, this has been crafted with such precision, for it just spoke to my SOUL...its so INCREDIBLE...Its well said and so INSPIRING...I loved this piece...I really ENJOYED reading this one...Its just PHENOMENAL...It blessed my HEART...Thank you!Nobantu
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by Nobantu | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a beautiful poem! a great expression of such a powerful emotion and feeling! I really liked the good and bad theme of it all and agree with you! lots of people claim they love someone only to find that when troubles arise they are gone. Finding that someone is a gift all in itself! Nice job! Take care!
    | Posted on 2005-06-01 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty much grasped the whole love concept here! the way you write about love here gives me the image that love is a kind of gurardian angel, always around and keeping your spirits up. its a possitive attitude that love never goes away and also reflects that love will always take over (in a good way) which is true ! - like the rhythm - flowed really well xxxx great xx
    xxCallyxx
    | Posted on 2005-06-02 00:00:00 | by callycat | [ Reply to This ]
      When it comes to love, you could have a billions lines and it wouldn't be able to capture all of what love truly is, hmmm now, That's right God is love.
    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      you stole my title boy!

    see, this is the x i like. the happy, lovey dovey x! i'm so happy for you, it makes me smile just reading the titles of your poems (and then the actual poem). i'm so glad things are going well for you... (it's not better than mine though lol) just kiddin, love ya.
    | Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! I wish I could get my man to see love this way. He seems to think that it's all about sex and staying together no matter what. Even when a disagreement comes up, he ignores it, because "if we fight, then we don't love each other."

    You have such great insight to so many things. I can relate to so many of the things that you write about, it's a nice change to some of the other things you read about.

    I appreciate your work greatly and look forward to reading more... Keep up the great work, and I'll be reading more later.

    Unicorn
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by Unicorn Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      aww this is sooo sweet!

    you should read this to your lil lady. the idea that your man has these intense and sweet ideas of love is probably the best feeling in the world! nice job
    -nikki
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was put in a beautiful way. I really liked it. I especially liked the second to last stanza. You did a wonderful job definning love and what it is all about. To me it had a good rythme. It was kind of catchy.

    I also really like the second stanza. I really liked it lots. Keep on writing.

    Much love to ya,
    Mikki
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yay, I guess you're still in love! All very nicely put, my man, you can't have too much love! Next time you drop in, have a look at my "You Are" the two poems compliment each other well.
    Well done,
    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Your last stanza signed sealed and delivered this to me...

    I did get tangled up in the second stanza though it didnt seem to be as silky as the rest..but that may have just been me...

    anyhoo ya know your good so yada yada yada... lol :P
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      wow great job it is kinda of ironic because i submitted a poem called Internal Arugements...I think you commented.. And it ttalked about not knowing wether to go for love or not..of course i dont believe in lovve at 16 but this poem really expressed what it is...Im glad that you wrote it because it feels like God answered my prayers...and it isnt really that i dont want love just that i dont think i am ready for it.. Thanks for the poem..Keep writting
    RandiKae
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by RandiKae | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this.. it's really nice. The message is good. It reads easy, and just sounds good as it flows off the tongue..lol
    A very nice piece about love that you brought out quite eloquently.

    Take Care!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very elegant. You broke it down boy! You always seem to come out of the blue with the most sincere pieces. It allows us to know that when you have to get tough, you can, yet you are still a sensitive man. And that amazes me that you can fully fulfill both rolls.

    Great job boo!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very impressive, and quite different from the sobs, heartaches, etc. generally posted on the love category. I really liked the 5th and 6th stanzas:

    and when LOVE is felt
    it is the greatest of things
    disagreements will arise
    but LOVE stands in between

    for LOVE is keen
    what understanding it brings
    for when one feels like giving up
    LOVE intervenes

    Overall good write, although you could make the rhyming more uniform than it is.

    "if you play a wonderful note with the wrong key,
    then you just might ruin the melodey"
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by smily | [ Reply to This ]


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