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    dots Submission Name: Caughtdots

    Author: Oracle
    ASL Info:    24/ F /NY
    Elite Ratio:    4.63 - 423/313/46
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
    Total Views: 840
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 664

       Imagine with me......

    There is a war and you have been setup to loose, but you've set some traps of your own...

    A hot and humid jungle, your comrades and the beast that stalks you....

    Let me know what you think!

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    You burst into the cool of night
    hear his voice,
    stars shine bright.

    Running through the underbrush...
    Quick, here they come!
    Now! Double back...
    Let them run.

    Holy howls rend the air..
    tripping, running back, see who feel into your lair.

    'Round the hold many eyes are lite
    Brethern from every nation flit
    Gather round...... we caught HIM in the pit.

    We now see how justice lies
    the faulted seed with no disguise
    he thought to see us die...
    We wait to see him fry!

    Submitted on 2005-04-14 18:46:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this piece for it's story, I always like a good story. And this one was good. I don't think means anything does it? Poetically? Maybe I'm just totally blind and it has some deep meaning. I took it as a story. Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2005-05-21 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]
            Frankly, I never thought I'd read something that sounded so vicious from you. Then again, I haven't been around for almost a year! People change. Heh. In any case, this sounds like you're rather angry at something, or someone. I wonder who. It evokes a lot of emotions, some of which are rather dark. Maybe I'm reading it wrong. Hmm. Either way, it's beautifully written.

    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by Seiraryu | [ Reply to This ]

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