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I'm Not Crying


Author: Mia
ASL Info:    17/F/MD
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I'm Not Crying



I'm not crying.
You hurt me
And you don't even know it
You don't try to help me
Or at least you don't show it
But trust me, I'm not crying.
Never mind, you don't trust me either
Even though together
We have all been through so much
Together, through all the years
And all the tears
But no, now I'm not crying.
You gave up on me
Although I never did give up on you
You'd think we'd be close
But no, you push me further away
So I can't help you
And I can't help myself
But don't worry, I'm not crying.
All the secrets kept from me
They sting, but I bear it
I pretend to have no troubles of my own
But you, who knows me so well,
You should know I need help
But I'm not crying.
I wear myself out
With worry, with stress
All these feelings building up in my chest
Just waiting for someone to come along
And realize that something's wrong
No way, I'm not crying.
How much longer
Can I handle all this?
How much longer
Will you continue to hurt me?
Optimism is a lovely thing
For without it I bet I'd be long gone by now
But I must keep my optimism
I will not give up
And fine
I admit it
I'm crying.




Submitted on 2005-04-14 20:21:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I liked thispoem. I can relate to it realy well, seeing as I felt like this not to long ago. Its a great poem and I expetialy like the ending. Great Job
| Posted on 2005-05-08 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]
  i really liked this poem. it reminds me alot of a very current situation im in with a "friend".so i can relate.the structure was good.the piece was really good, and it hits home for me.
| Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by whatever14 | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree with UNderStood about the floow. It was nice. I can relate to it. It's always cool to read something you can relate to..except for when it seems to close to what your going through and then it's just wierd. newayz. I rele liked it! I hope to see more work from you in the future. I also like that this doesn't rhyme. I'm trying to get away from writeing rhyming poems..It's harder for me to write ones that don't rhyme. Newho. I admire your talent..and I think you did a great job with this!
| Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]
  i really enjoyed reading this..it has a great flow and a awesome ending you did well at writing this hope to hear more from you
keep it up
~Sam~
| Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by UNunderStood | [ Reply to This ]
  This is somewhat in relation to a piece I did about friendship. I can relate to it.. I have a bond to your piece and that's the first reason I love it... I also enjoyed its flow.. it was not boring or over descriptive.. just right I think. I truly hope you continue on with your gift of writing.
| Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by Isaac | [ Reply to This ]


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