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    dots Submission Name: Just For A Whiledots

    Author: PookiezBookie
    ASL Info:    16/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 103/129/49
    Words: 31
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 1294
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    dotsJust For A Whiledots

    Only for a day I will cry for you
    Only a night I will dream of you
    Only for a while will I mourn you
    But forever I will remember you

    Submitted on 2005-04-14 22:57:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this one, it was short and real

    this is kid i thought it was thoughtfull

    me again, the words had a nice flow and went togeather good, all and all it was a good write and like your others i really liked it.
    | Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      its packed with a sense of 'its the end but ill never forget what we went through'

    Though its not very long the piece creates in itself an endless time of history that seems as if itll always live on. Great write, I see no errors..wouldnt add or detract a thing
    | Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by lolavie | [ Reply to This ]
      You are very good at writing short peices that are packed with power. I enjoyed this peice so much. A suppose it better than trying to write a long peice that has weak parts. For some reason though I think I have read a poem very simular to this before, an uncanny connection. Nonetheless I liked this peice. Short, simple, and o' so sweet. Keep up the good work and thanks for the pleasant read.
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by ConScribe | [ Reply to This ]

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