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    dots Submission Name: Fall we willdots
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    Author: ARCHIE
    ASL Info:    37 YOA Male in Africa
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 90/126/40
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsFall we willdots
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    In the end we all must fall
    sometimes climbing
    sometimes just sitting there
    but fall we will
    creeping softly through the chambers
    of the body blood pooled
    stricken or in an instant
    fall we will
    life drained darkly in a hot tub
    fall we will
    bent and crooked as an old tree
    fall we will
    wet and womb warm
    fall we will
    We must fall leaf brittle
    ground or ashes or the wet seas cold embrace
    for with each ones simple falling
    so the round of life replace




    Submitted on 2005-04-15 08:04:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like the 1st 4 lines...not bad...not bad at all...what you say is true...we will all fall...maybe sooner...maybe later..but fall we will...
    | Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by Alyra | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like your poem. Good job. My favorite part was the first four lines. Keep up the good work. I hope to read more of your stuff.
    | Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by lonely poet | [ Reply to This ]


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