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    dots Submission Name: This is Itdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Thoughts...tell me.

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    dotsThis is Itdots

    She was in her room...listening for any familar sound. The thoughts that were in her head were loud and out of focus. She wasn't even sure if she had been dreaming or remembering. She closed her eyes and painted a picture of the solution there.What was going to happen to her?

    Submitted on 2005-04-15 12:02:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked the ending the most.I love the suspense.Im not sure what to consider this but oh well.none the less i loved it. i wish it had alittle bit more description though.
    | Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Jazz, i liked it alot, it was kool...definitly add more please, it would make it all the better for it, i mean, real good (promise), well ttul, bye Jazz
    | Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]
      It kinda reminds me of a song... uh, what's it called? Wait for Sleep by Dreamtheatre. :0
    Now I'm gonna think of the lyrics.

    But anyway. I'm still trying to figure out if I like this or not or what sort of thing you were trying to convey...but I can't really.
    All I can say is that it sounds familier to me. o.O
    | Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
      Isn't this supposed to be a song? It really does seem to be more of a short story. Add to it it could turn into something great.
    | Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]
      This would be a great start to a short story! i like the element of mystery, it holds my attention and makes me want to read more.
    | Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]

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