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    dots Submission Name: When I Get To Youdots

    Author: wildcatchamps
    ASL Info:    33 Las Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    5.42 - 47/57/34
    Words: 300
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 561
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    dotsWhen I Get To Youdots

    Anytime I need to see your face,
    I just close my eyes
    And I am taken to a place where
    your crystal mind and
    Magenta feelings take up shelter
    in the base of my spine
    Sweet like a cherry cola
    I don't need to try and explain;
    I just hold on tight
    And if it happens again, I might move
    so slightly
    To the arms and the lips and the face
    of the human cannonball
    That I need to, I want to

    Come stand a little bit closer
    Breathe in and get a bit higher
    You'll never know what hit you
    When I get to you

    Ooh, I want you
    I don't know if I need you
    But, ooh, I'd die to find out
    Ooh, I want you
    I don't know if I need you
    But, ooh, I'd die to find out

    I'm the kind of person who endorses
    a deep commitment
    Getting comfy getting perfect
    is what I live for
    But a look, then a smell of perfume
    It's like I'm down on the floor
    And I don't know what I'm in for

    Conversation has a time and place
    In the interaction of a lover and
    a mate,
    But the time of talking,
    using symbols, using words
    Can be likened to a deep sea diver
    who is swimming with a raincoat

    Come stand a little bit closer
    Breathe in and get a bit higher
    You'll never know what hit you
    When I get to you

    So can we find out?

    Submitted on 2005-04-15 13:10:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey. i dont mean to be negative here. but yeah. you totally ripped the off without ANY acknowledgement. around here...thats a murderous offense.

    the least you could have done was say that it was a song previously written - and i do mean LEAST.

    i've been here a while and i see you have too. surly you would have known better. yeah. *just slightly confused* i dont get why someone who would seemingly understand the importance of writing something would pull a stunt like this. not giving credit is a big deal. why on earth want to have to deal with the thought of "hey they might know thats not mine" and surely you wouldnt want to go down in the record books as a plagerist so that everyone around here just stayed away from your work. I DONT GET IT!

    but yeah. think next time, cuz you're always gonna get caught.
    | Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by Printer Shock | [ Reply to This ]
      WOw, this is alot. I mean the first couple lines were so strong, and so much to it, it got confusing. I felt that I had to understand or pick up so much info in little words. That is very neat. some ways.

    Ooh, I want you
    I don't know if I need you
    But, ooh, I'd die to find out

    For the chorus
    I love the first two lines
    but it dies out when I read the third line
    I mean for some reason, it doesn't sound right.
    I made a backround while I was reading it, and in the backround it doesn't really go.
    But maybe the way you wanted it to be, it goes. Not sure
    I think you have strong emotions, I don't know what to say really, so people want more emotion, but this I think has a lot. And alot to handle just reading the first couple lines. Which like I said is neat, but can be confusing.

    Keep writing
    | Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm...very confused - isnt this a song? I'm sure I've heard the chorus before.....

    *goes to Google first few lines*

    Ok, it is a song. Even more confused. Is this just to share something you like, or to *eeeeeek* plagiarize a piece of writing?

    | Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by Katia | [ Reply to This ]

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