Well I think you made everyone laugh at this one.. So yet all real.. You did a good job with this. Just like all your writes you write.. Anyways every write you write, it seems like for some reason its like I wrote something just like or it differant.. but hey I just guess thats just the way it turns out..
Well anyways you did a good job with this, everything flowed good, and the images were great... Sometimes its hard not to think about something like this.. I think we all do.. in ways
I don't think you should delete this and I think you decided not to, cause I think you wrote this a while ago.. So keep it up here.. People will see view and comment...
That's the one brutha, tell it how it is lol. Nothing wrong with a bit of honesty, huh? I thought I would check out some of your stuff, and being a walking hormone as another ES writer once said recently in one of my comments (Inducted_Kitty lol), the title was begging me to have a quick look hahaha.
I like how you don't dress anything up here. Pure and unadulterated horniness. It's great. It's really what goes through a lot of guy's mind's when they're getting all kinkified with their lady hahaha.
Damn, you tell it like it is, don't you? I loved the second stanza, very... descriptive. It kept a light, humorous tone through out, which adds to the enjoyment of its sexual nature. And the title fits with the very matter of fact nature of the piece well.
Love it, sexy. I almost had to light a cigarette and I don't even smoke. Lol, very interesting, I can see your freaky side come out in this one. Well I'll holla at ya later. I just want to let you know that this is going on my favorites. -Charlenee
Haha...This was good. You really did get the message across.I agree with kinesthesia that it could be offensive, but you should be able to tell by the title what it is about. I thought it really had a good flow to it. So good imagery too. I don't think you should delete either. It was a very good piece to read, you made me laugh today.
This is a good one! Great imagination! Great rhymes! Are fond of rap or hiphop music? Because this poem reminded me of that. Anyway...
Great imagination in this part,
I tell that I want to have a taste Of your sugary walls, Your delightful Milkshake, And your cherry falls.
Then this part really made me laugh
Then hit it from the back I'll have you screaming "Keep doing it like that"
If you thought you were ready You really don't have a clue Because I have 365 more positions In my kamasutra book just for you
Lol. I never thought there was someone in this site that write like that! This poem made me laugh, been awhile since the last time I had a good laugh. Anyway, good write! This is going to my fave's! hahaha!
I wanna [censored] you Like the man in your dreams Have you screaming like a [censored] And yelling crazy things
That just amde me laugh cause it made me think of someone. I like the second stanza. I think it had a good flow to it. At least you know what you are talking about. I dont think you should delete this. I think its pretty good.
Well keep wriitng. I will try to look for more of your wriitings