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    dots Submission Name: Oppression Gamedots
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    Author: Katj
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 103/89/24
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 826
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1062



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       I don't know quite where this came from. I just sat down at my desk to write and this is the product. But I rather liked it. What do you think?


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    dotsOppression Gamedots
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    So who wants to go first?
    Step right up and learn your fate,
    Keep on playing the oppression game.
    Everyone canít wait to get in line,
    And discover how their shitty life will end up.

    OK, youíre first,
    Spin the wheel of mayhem.
    It turns around slowing down with each mind numbing tick on the tab,
    Finally slowing down,
    To the last stop at the last tick.

    Congratulations!
    Your spin shows that you will get stuck in a dead end job!
    A job that provides you no satisfaction,
    And exposes you to multiple sexual harassment cases-
    Some even by your excellent boss.
    And no, you canít quit this job,
    How else are you going to support the kids?
    Three children with three different fathers.
    Thatís your life.
    Canít Wait to start it.

    Whoís next?
    I know everyone is truly excited to play,
    Donít be afraid.
    Everyone will get a turn!
    Everyone will get screwed!
    Whoís next?




    Submitted on 2005-04-15 23:39:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This gloom and doom poem is well thought out and executed. I see what you are saying here like how people all read the same horscopes in the newspaper and truly expect the GOOD things to happen...it is outlandish and so naive and you hit it on the nail! `always poetry, Cheryl.
    | Posted on 2005-04-16 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty good, and pretty dark! Is there no hope at all for us ordinary nice guys? LOL
    I must say, although I can't agree with the inevitability of disaster for all of us, you wrote this extremely well
    Nicely done
    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-04-16 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      i am gonna fucccking cry damn you... i hate crying most of the time... this poem touches me and makes me think of my life, my father, my brother, my friends, the poeple i know and love, life and how unfair it is... truely it is masterful and one of the best metaphors for just how [censored]ed up life can be i have ever seen. oh geewhiz never stop writing.

    Donít be afraid.
    Everyone will get a turn!
    Everyone will get screwed!
    Whoís next?

    weep...
    | Posted on 2005-04-16 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]
      OHHHHH...This kinda has the STEP right up...hurry hurry come one come all, welcome to a miserable life feel to it!

    very nicely done...sad and unfortunately true but still very nicely done!
    -Nikki
    | Posted on 2005-06-15 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]


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