Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Senryudots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 10
    Class/Type: Haiku/Love
    Total Views: 562
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 77



    Description:
       back to the writing about my hunnie


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsSenryudots
    -------------------------------------------


    A classic sweet grin
    Raised eyebrow of wonder
    Compelling Allure




    Submitted on 2005-04-16 15:54:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      This is appealing to me because it's sensual but not overly sexual. It's suggestive, but you still made it obvious that you love her. I applaud you for putting so much into so little words. Great write.
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Luckyduck | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice that u are able to find inspiration of LOVE & LIFE in your "Hunnie". Bless u all and to all a great Sunday!

    Love, Peace, Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      A vivid and sweet image of a seductive "come hither" look. Well done in your word imagery. It reads quite well. I'm starting to appreciate haiku/senyru writings, if done well, such as this lovely poem.

    Take Care!
    ~Sanda
    | Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Most Excellent Ben loving this poem not nothing to say except always appreciating cheryl but you know I have to type a longer or this program es uses pucks me lmao! Ciao! `Always appreciating, Cheryl.
    | Posted on 2005-04-16 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      OK, just so other readers understand that I AM a dickhead...I just read your descrition after I'd posted the comment, D'Oh!
    I should have known what a lovestruck schoolboy would be writing about...
    Fair dinkum, I'm such a dick...
    Be Happy, anyway
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-04-16 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, Ben, (must pm you about that) nice! I love guessing games...let's se...Mona Lisa!
    Go on, tell me it's about your cat or something, burst my bubble. How's the missus? I'll check now for new posts from her
    Seeya
    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-04-16 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    54909

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    no sky on the other side written by teika5
    a leaf of shadow and edge written by Daniel Barlow
    Dream written by closetpoet
    Meaningless Meanings written by ForgottenGraves
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    Hyle written by endlessgame23
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Gaia written by endlessgame23
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    Mystery Read written by kyserin
    Snippet written by Daniel Barlow
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Day 6 written by TheStillSilence
    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    Ciggarettes written by Poetic_tragedy6
    A Sense Of Things written by Daniel Barlow
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    The World written by jjd
    None the Wiser written by endlessgame23
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry