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    dots Submission Name: Senryudots
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    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 10
    Class/Type: Haiku/Love
    Total Views: 583
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 77



    Description:
       back to the writing about my hunnie


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    dotsSenryudots
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    A classic sweet grin
    Raised eyebrow of wonder
    Compelling Allure




    Submitted on 2005-04-16 15:54:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is appealing to me because it's sensual but not overly sexual. It's suggestive, but you still made it obvious that you love her. I applaud you for putting so much into so little words. Great write.
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Luckyduck | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice that u are able to find inspiration of LOVE & LIFE in your "Hunnie". Bless u all and to all a great Sunday!

    Love, Peace, Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      A vivid and sweet image of a seductive "come hither" look. Well done in your word imagery. It reads quite well. I'm starting to appreciate haiku/senyru writings, if done well, such as this lovely poem.

    Take Care!
    ~Sanda
    | Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Most Excellent Ben loving this poem not nothing to say except always appreciating cheryl but you know I have to type a longer or this program es uses pucks me lmao! Ciao! `Always appreciating, Cheryl.
    | Posted on 2005-04-16 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      OK, just so other readers understand that I AM a dickhead...I just read your descrition after I'd posted the comment, D'Oh!
    I should have known what a lovestruck schoolboy would be writing about...
    Fair dinkum, I'm such a dick...
    Be Happy, anyway
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-04-16 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, Ben, (must pm you about that) nice! I love guessing games...let's se...Mona Lisa!
    Go on, tell me it's about your cat or something, burst my bubble. How's the missus? I'll check now for new posts from her
    Seeya
    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-04-16 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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