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    dots Submission Name: Tender momentdots

    Author: ContortedDreams
    ASL Info:    16/3/LA
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 2/6/4
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       uhmm...a weird one for me. i was just talkin to my mother..then she told me some stuff...which inspired me to write this.....not that good..but it has helped me with what i needed help with

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    dotsTender momentdots

    Secretive lies you once bestowed
    Horryfying nights where my heart goes cold
    You unraveled yourself to me
    One night, one moment, just you and me
    Heart to heart, we're talking in dialect
    Spider web of emotions that only you affect
    Mother and son, then no one else
    Locked in cages so you could help
    I saw the pain in your eyes
    Please mother, please don't cry
    I will be there for eternity, just for you
    Together we'll last forever, just me and you
    A little boy grown to quick, I'll be
    Seen your life through my eyes, I'll be
    I'll be the noble kid you thought you lost
    Teenage years are a lost cause
    I listen to your lessons and morals
    You've taught me so well, you taught me abnormal
    Abnormal responsiblities of a son
    The loving tender thoughts of your son

    Submitted on 2005-04-16 18:33:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It seems what ever talk you had with your mom moved you and that is worth something to me. I'm glad you don't hold in emotion and you put it right out there. As to the writing... well I had to read it 3 times to understand some of it... I think you have missing letter in words and a spelling mistake. None the less... once corrected.. cool! Cheers!
    | Posted on 2005-04-16 00:00:00 | by Isaac | [ Reply to This ]

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