The pacing on this one is stunning. It moves with force cuz of your phrasing and short strong wording. It made me frantic as I read it which IMO is what this piece is all about. The frantic moves of night.
i liked the "holy howls." you have a few typos... "lite" should be "lit," "hold" should be "hole," and "feel" should be "fell." sorry, i don't mean to be the typo police! it'll just read better with the right words. i like this, that we shine the light right at the devil and catch him in his misdeeds. hooray for the good side! i'm curious as to why you spelled caught with a k...?