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    dots Submission Name: drip awaydots
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    Author: darkonesgirl
    ASL Info:    21/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 233/245/125
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
    Total Views: 1001
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 622



    Description:
       I wrote this about one of my ex boyfriends after he promised me forever but then went and got my best friend pregnate little to say my heart was broken and i never did go back to him after that even after all his begging and pleading


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    I never thought you would leave me
    especially not for her
    my hearts breaking
    i loved you
    did you even care for me
    was it just for the sex
    what did i do wrong
    why didnít you tell me
    why tell me those things
    if you were to do that
    my heart the emerald
    lays in a million pieces
    where you threw it away
    and left it
    tears now stain my cheeks
    hunger reeks threw my body
    i cant bear to kiss
    another man where
    we last kissed
    from a long lost lovers lips
    doth the last drop of life drip away




    Submitted on 2005-04-16 19:21:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      my boyfriend broke up with me wed...a "trust" *yea right* thing...that night he went and [censored]ed some chick...i mean we've been dating since september on and off yea know and it kinda hurts to realize you can be replaced that quick...he has done worse though...he a sweetheart when we're ok but when we fight we fight...ok now yer poem...ok hun that guy is a pig! you didnt do anything wrong...guys are just jerks...maybe you did something i dont know you but dont let yourself think its your fault for something he knew he was doing and he knew would hurt you...he is a complete and total ass!


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    | Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      that must've been a horrible experience. i'm sorry..the work of poetry was a great one...free stance, but yet has a lot of feeling

    i cant bear to kiss
    another man where
    we last kissed
    from a long lost lovers lips
    doth the last drop of life drip away

    that is a very interesting way of ending it...i feel your pain...i'm sorry..but great poetry
    | Posted on 2005-04-16 00:00:00 | by ContortedDreams | [ Reply to This ]


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