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Stop At Penny Lane


Author: LucyDiamond
ASL Info:    17/F/Sky
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Words: 157
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I just had to get it out. Sorry if it doesn't make sense. There actually is meaning...but I don't really think I'll tell. Just let me know what you think.


Stop At Penny Lane



You were you and he was he
But he forgot his medicine,
And so, he was you and you were he
But, as it happens, those words are lost
Completely gone, I consider
As they will never leave your mouth again...
Nothing will...as time goes on, you fail to differ
So old in the ways you have found
But I can tell that child is still around
I hear it everyday, I hear what you say
Sometimes I try to listen...I really do.
Something draws me. Which is why
I must draw it out...whether it’s when I write or cry
But I’m over it. I have to be.
Either way you’ll never see...
Anyways, it’s not the path on which I want to be.
So. I’ll visit you every now and then
When, I don’t know. But I seriously have to go.

Oh, and I’m sorry your buttons smelled bad even though it wasn’t my fault.




Submitted on 2005-04-17 01:56:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hahaha first of all, love the beatles title. goes so well with what your poem is about. and it gives this great image of Paul and Ringo, all old and wrinkled meeting at Penny Lane and walking across again.

second, the last line is awsome. for me, it made the whole poem. your going on about serious things and then, "your buttons smell". haha!

now everything in between the title and the last line was a little sad to me. two old friends,not kids anymore, meeting after such a long time. it makes you sad cause those two could have been best friends for 20 years, but now, there old and have no idea how the other person is or what there up to. all in all a really good write, makes you think about how your going to turn out when you get older, and if your actually going to stay in touch with all your friends.

KEEP WRITTING! AND LISTENING TO THE BEATLES!

-edward scissorhands o.O
| Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by EdwardScissorhands | [ Reply to This ]
  The feeling I get from this is... it's sort of like visting someone old and drawn inside themselves.. hard to get to... doesn't have much to give back to anyone and complains when you try to help, they don't "really see you" when you're there.
I could be way off on the actual meaning...but that's what I see when I read this. It's compelling and deep... yet I sense the emotion you put into it.

Take Care!
~Sandra
| Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  ok its something to do with the beatles... I dont know the words to the song so i cant figure it out.. im guessing something about drugs.. Ill have to catch up on my beatles
Shaun
| Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by shanu | [ Reply to This ]


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