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    dots Submission Name: Spiderlanddots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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       I was dry for ideas, but I was listening to the cd Spiderland by Slint, so the title inspired me.


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    The guard at the entrance said, "You'll have to double your limbs before you can enter here." I sat for awhile until it occured to me to go out and find my epipsyche.

    Years later, I returned to Spiderland, and the gatekeeper said, "Well, you spin beautiful yarns, though yours are made from words, and with your soul mate, you have the requisite number of appendages, so enter and stay as long as you please."

    My love and I didn't know what to expect, but it was a whole world made of crystal webs dewed with human tears (As they evaporate, they reappear in the world of the octopeds). We stood beneath the carefully croqueted and knitted white scarves of the spider grannies with open mouths to taste the honey-sweet happy tears, and with our hands, we spun word webs that made the eight-limbed citizens cheer. The applause only made more eye water fall onto our waiting lips, and our hands worked overtime making word sweaters and word afghans for the shivering spiders.




    Submitted on 2005-04-17 02:25:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you double your limbs with a significant other...and then can get into spiderland..where you weave a web of togetherness...and yes the tears could destroy the web but if we use them properly we can make more faster than they disappear...

    i really like this...you are good with prose...easy with it.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-09-22 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. You obviously have a wide vocabulary and are very creative. Is this just an excerpt? If it isn't, you could make a whole story out of this. I really enjoyed the end,

    "The applause only made more eye water fall onto our waiting lips, and out hands worked overtime making word sweaters and word afghans for the shivering spiders. "

    Good Job.
    | Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by Mia | [ Reply to This ]
      You are one amazing wordspinner. I've said this over and over again. Your work is always above average and Spiderland is no exception.
    It's a wonder you're not writing for a living (or are you?) Your imagination and talent eclipses so many other contemporary writers'.

    Oh,and I'm afraid of spiders.
    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this, I remember when you sent this to me before. I liked it then and still do. I'm glad that you've gotten some positive reviews on it too. I love how they begin to make sweaters and afghans. Also, that the webs are made of words, it reminded me of all us who do this. I think itsey bitsey would be best because I could travel to faraway lands by hopping in pockets. It would be cool to write the story of the"carrier" too.
    Hugs and love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww I enjoyed this a lot. A little Spidey tale indeed! I really think you should do a childrens book of poetry. Sort of like Shel Silverstein *I think I just butchered his name!* hehe. This really flows well. For you to be dry of ideas when you wrote this it turned out great. :) Great piece. I really liked it.
    -blt
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely tale you spin, ( a Cobb-web?). This is almost trippy, surreal visuals and enchanting words. It has an ingenue quality, yet is very compelling in the fantasy department, -beyond a child's story.I think of Charlotte's Web, Alice in Wonderland, and the Native American legend of the Dreamcatcher ( the exact name of the spiderwoman escapes me Nokomis?-) Anyway this is delightful, and certainly original.
    You always amaze me .
    Sally
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      Amy this is amazing. The idea is phenomenal. I love that out tears go to spider land. Were dew drops on webs inspiration for this? I like that you included happy tears in there. I pzzled as to why the spiders were shivering...but then I thought"Hey they just are" and accepted it lol! Love it love love love it! Write more like this I want to learn from you :)
    Kate xoxoxo
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      Funny, I wrote "Girl in the Mulberry Tree" about you, and in it you are spinning silk, but of course as a caterpillar, not a spider. This is a different little write. I'm not sure what it is. It's almost a super-short short story with bunches of surrealism and symbolism. Can't really say that I completely know the purpose of each line, but I still get the gist of it all...I think. Well, anywho, it was nice to see something original. Not an easy thing to do.
    | Posted on 2005-04-18 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so creative, Amy! we can always expect interesting and unique ideas coming from you! i have a fear of spiders, actually. i found a tarantula in my house one time in the middle of the night. i put a cup over it and piled tons of books on top of it 'til i could get my landlord to come and retrieve it in the morning. needless to say, i got no sleep that night!

    this is so whimsical and fun to read.

    a whole world made of crystal webs dewed with human tears

    this paints such a beautiful picture. i am always fascinated by spider webs with the dew glancing off of them in the sunshine.

    you are a wonder, Amy! i'd love to spend a day or two in your mind...
    | Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I really love this.

    I got out of it, that things are different with two people, and that's where you get spiderland. With two people, there are eight limbs. Tell me if I'm way off here, but I really liked it.

    -emo.
    | Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked that fact that you can make something so interesting and pretty out of imagination. I am not all the time sure what you imageriry means,but I can feel it.
    | Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked that fact that you can make something so interesting and pretty out of imagination. I am not all the time sure what you imageriry means,but I can feel it.
    | Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]
      You have painted a lovely visual i particularly liked the second part of the prose..i could not help, re-reading it and pasting it here...

    but it was a whole world made of crystal webs dewed with human tears (As they evaporate, they reappear in the world of the octopeds). We stood beneath the carefully croqueted and knitted white scarves of the spider grannies with open mouths to taste the honey-sweet happy tears, and with our hands, we spun word webs that made the eight-limbed citizens cheer. The applause only made more eye water fall onto our waiting lips, and out hands worked overtime making word sweaters and word afghans for the shivering spiders.

    nicely written. this doesn't seem to go away from my mind for a very long time, now.
    | Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
      what a cute story! i could picture the webs all over this place glistenening, dripping, little grannies in rickity rockers spinning thier afgans and a web of words that u were creating.
    | Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by laniejane | [ Reply to This ]


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