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    dots Submission Name: It Will Never Raindots

    Author: Emma_closes
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 88/111/44
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       This is a poem that I've been meaning to write for a very long time. I'm still dealing with all of this, it's still new to me, but I am finally moving forward. And I think it's starting to sink in.

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    dotsIt Will Never Raindots

    I know the wind will someday stop,
    whispering your name.
    I know the clouds will someday drop,
    and it will never rain.
    I know that one day it must change,
    I loved you far too much.
    And I wouldn't think it very strange,
    if mountains wept for us.
    I wouldn't blink an eye,
    if flames began to melt,
    I wouldn't wonder if,
    it was exactly how you felt,
    nor if you asked me why no sound,
    would come out of the thunder.
    I wouldn't wonder at the sun
    if it suddenly dropped under.
    And I would know the answer,
    to the stars' now subtle hue.
    It wouldn't strike me as ironic,
    that the world ended just for you.

    Submitted on 2005-04-17 17:15:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem was obviously about a painful experience. I wasn't quite sure if it was about a breakup or someone you know passed away...but the flow and rhyme pattern was well written. It wasn't a poem that keeps dragging on and on and on. Very good job.
    The only advice I can offer is that when you are writing a poem on a serious subject, please change your picture...It's very hard to be in a sad state of mind with Stimpy singing "happy happy joy joy" in your head :P


    excellent job

    | Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]

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