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    dots Submission Name: Dead, yet still Alive...dots
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    Author: ForsakenAngel
    ASL Info:    19/F/Arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    6.37 - 147/73/18
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    Description:
       This is just a poem I wrote tonight while thinking about my ex boyfriend. I really did and still do love him but I can't keep letting him drop me and hurt me thinking he can always pick me back up when ever he fells like it. Hope you like it and just please tell me what you think.


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    dotsDead, yet still Alive...dots
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    You tell me you love me,
    but how do I know that's true?
    You've told me once...
    you've even told me twice.

    You say you love me,
    then drop me like i'm nothing.
    You threw my heart on the ground
    and stepped on me when I was down.

    I thought I knew you,
    then you changed...

    I thought I loved you,
    then you proved it true...

    I thought I hated you,
    then you made me laugh...

    I thouhgt it would be impossibe to live w/out u
    then you proved me wrong.

    When you left...
    I thought I would die
    and now I am dead,
    yet still Alive!




    Submitted on 2005-04-17 21:25:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is good, I like the whole thing where you got the the contradiction in each set of lines...who was this about, I bet it's petty...I'm sorry about how all that effected you but now you seem to be ok!
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      hey...i like it...simple n nice...
    well i think relationships r a very good inspiration for all of us to write poetry n songs check out my song which i wrote for my ex its called so long,take care also check out other stull like women n life as we know it...keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2005-12-31 00:00:00 | by anooplokur | [ Reply to This ]
      She is not infatuated with that [censored]. Which he is. I like this write and I will probally put Peter Pan on here soon. You are not dead only thinking this way cuz he is a jackass.

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    | Posted on 2005-04-18 00:00:00 | by ria_pixie | [ Reply to This ]
      Good for you"yet still alive."
    I'm not a love lorn columnist but it seems one of you or both of you have the idea of love and friendship all hexed up.
    He considers yiou a friend who can pick up the pieces. You consider him a lover which he is not.
    I think you are infatuated to the idea that you can make that guy love you by feining rejection.
    Its better for the heart to cool than for the toes to curl.
    | Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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