this is good.I can't criticize it at all...the only thing I can say is that It should be longer...but you say its not finished yet, so I doubt saying that would hold much purpose...who is this about....meghan...or maybe your mother...?
A nice write . You begin with your pain of watching the pain. You end with the person who is paining paining more because that person knows you can do nothing about it.
I took the comma out of your second stanza to arrive at my above comment. With the commas remaining you are further paining because the person is paining. Which one of the above is your aim of the poem I do not know. Yet I prefer the comma gone since it speaks of friend to friend.