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    dots Submission Name: "BLOOD"dots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I have a friend who sometimes when we talk I can tell he's worried about me , I feel his concern,though he tries to just beat around the bush, kind of like my Dad would always do. It's ok and I'm ok. But it's real nice to know that with all the fake made up decorated propaganda of A WORLD WE LIVE; SOMETHINGS-(SOME PEOPLE) YOU CAN ALWAYS COUNT ON-NO MATTER WHAT -BLOOD
    THIS IS FOR HIM


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    I have friend who worries about me.
    He sometimes reminds me of times when;
    I didn't have to say sorry for making him worry,
    And days when I was a better friend.
    He's just confused by my actions.
    And baffled at the things that plague me.
    He says it's hard to imagine
    why I've always trampled the road that's paved for me.
    I don't know why I am like I am.....
    I just am you know?
    It's not easy standing where I stand,
    And going places that I go.
    He says I got it made;
    But that's only half true.
    Everytime I fall down I know I'll be saved;
    because I got someone around like you.....

    blood




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      Arn't you just a sweetheart, lol. Well read the comment I put on "Bro-Song" twice I feel the same for this one. Great write man, I like this style for you it comes out very well.
    Take Care,
    Tom
    | Posted on 2005-05-10 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      Yay! an other sentimental (more or less) piece from Mike. It's awesome to see this side of you. I know what it's like to have friends like that, but it sucks so much when they just disappear. It's like losing your security blanket or that stuffed teddy bear all over again. But dude, eventually we've all got to learn to live without those people. And life will be better. Yeah, we'll have more scars and broken bones and broken hearts, but it's kind of worth it. Or at least that's what I think.

    I like how you worte this one a lot. Like spoken says, it does seem like your talking to the reader and then to him. But it seems to me that you're going back to the line "And days when I was a better friend." Like, it seems like you're trying to tell him about this awesome friend that you have, and he's probably getting mad becuase he sees that what you're talking about things that he's done for you like someone else did them, but then you totally turn it around and thank him for it. I don't think that I've seen that from you before, and you know what? I love it. Because it proves that everything is not what you think it is...

    ~Jess
    | Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by shmuzzelle | [ Reply to This ]
      This was rather sentimental. Everyone needs a good friend, and you have captured emotion fairly well. Writing something for a friend is a very personal thing, and it is a sweet thing to do. I have written a few poems for friends, and it is nice to know that other people do it too.

    Nice write
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by xeternalshadowx | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you have shown everyone that you are more than meets the eye ( "robots in disguise"). .. sorry I am tired and when I wrote that line, that old song from the cartoon Transformers jumped into my head. Have you shown this to your friend? Do it. xo Mags
    | Posted on 2005-04-18 00:00:00 | by Magnolia | [ Reply to This ]
      aw, how very sentimental and sweet of you to write this for your friend. it is a wonderful gift to have people like this in our lives who care about us and look after us. i'm glad you have such a friend.
    | Posted on 2005-04-18 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      this seems prety sintimental for you, LT. I didn't think you had it in ya (lol). i think all people need friends like the person you are talking about. I'm fortunate to have several people in my world that i know are ride or die for me. Only think that threw me off is you end the poem in a way that makes it seem like you are talking to this peron (saying "ive got you") but up until that point its seems like you are talking to the reader ABOUT that person.

    Don't take friends like these for granted. And try to be that type of friend for people too. Life's more beautiful that way.

    SPoken

    P.S> thanx for reminding me about ace of spades. how could i forget.
    | Posted on 2005-04-18 00:00:00 | by spoken | [ Reply to This ]


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