Fantastic! I love the little girl/sing-song/lyric repetition, not many poems could get away with it but it works for me here. Nicely put, and a good ending after all the heartbreak, we always can repair the damage, even if the memory remains... Very nicely written Be Happy Graeme
I really enjoyed this piece. It is very creative. You have a very open mind to write something like this. The rhyming and the scheme of it is excellent. I like the meaning behind it as well. After all that you finally fixed your borken heart. Right on. Fav. list.
I really like this not only because I can relate I've been there twice in fact once when I was fifteen and again a week before this last christmas and at eighteen it's even worse the shame is so much worse. but your right he won't win, and time will heal the phisical wounds but the emotional ones are much harder to over come but stay strong.
cute. i like it... i really do.. but i only have one thing to say.... : TOO MUCH!! normally ppl (including myself) when i go to a poem.. and i see how large it is!! normally i dont read it.. i read this one cuz not only the title attractedme but also the first sentence.. but not everyone is like that.. so just remember... sum it up or idonno.. but dont make it so large.. i know the one before they told you to makeit longer but in my opinion its too long.. i didnt see the smaller version so i can't judge.. but i donno.. it seems too much in my opinionç! sorry! dont take it personally! *anita*