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    dots Submission Name: "Green"dots
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    Author: Nightmare
    ASL Info:    20/M/In the void...
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 9/16/26
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 797
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I wrote this while listening to A Perfect Circle...hope you like it.


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    dots"Green"dots
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    green fills your air
    surrounding a hidden place
    close off the world we see
    break by the powers of a mind, so benevolent...
    cease to amaze an ever evolving life...
    lasting until the last life loses it's light...

    empty until I throw the switch
    casting you to nothingness
    killing energies that were etenal
    last light fades...
    that light fills your face

    take me, turning me...
    tell me, torture me...
    no colors break the one
    the one fades soon, to none
    severe the sanity...
    change the spiral lighting the way

    light fades away...
    the power plays...
    such eratic ways...
    you might say...
    victims come by it's rays
    clouds look away
    so pure, the light shall fade
    bitter to the touch...
    what to do with your life...
    lasting through no purity and pain...




    Submitted on 2005-04-18 16:39:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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