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    dots Submission Name: "Mom"dots
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    Author: C. Flava
    ASL Info:    19/M/ILLINOIS
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 87/117/28
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       Don't get me wrong I love my mom but, she was wrong for what she did and what she's still doing and she needs to admitt it once and for all! THAT DUMB BITCH WHO TOSSES 5 FUCKING KIDS AWAY THEN LEAVE'S? TELL ME CAUSE I NEED TO KNOW! o yeah 1 love


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    dots "Mom"dots
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    Why must you do this me
    What have I done?
    Why do you hate me
    When I love so?

    You left all your kids
    Discarded us like thrash
    Why did you have us
    We would've been better off dead.

    What to tell my sibilings
    When mommy doesn't come back
    Maybe I'll tell them "FUCK THAT BITCH"
    Cause i'm all you got.




    Submitted on 2005-04-18 20:05:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well this one is way differant from the one called "dad". I wrote something kinda like this, but it was a little differant.. although it wasn't happening to me, just one of my classmates.. Which when I found out I was in real shock..

    He was in 7th grade and his mom would only care about getting high and a way to get high.. she would sell his clothes so she would have more money to get high... and all his toys, which I don't think he had much of.. many of the classmates in my class made fun of him not knowing is family trauma... if ya no what I mean. They would be like your breath stinks and those clothes are ugly and dirty and all that other stuff, which was mean.. but no one really new the other side of his life.. he went to school so he could get away from all that stuff, and he just had to go somewhere else where classmates would give him a hard time too.. but anough we that person, its pretty much a long story, and I don't feel like writing it all down..

    Again I can't believe something like this has happened to you. It sounds like something I don't know if I could handle. I just can't believe what some people have to go through.. especially when your mom left 5 children to you.. which most of the time I hear things like this happens, the kid has to drop out of school and everything like that.. But its good thing that you didn't or not going to.. or if you have... idk. But its not your fault... I really don't know what to say..
    Does she come and visit you or anything???

    Well I thought this was another good writes of yours especially how short and so much info is covered...

    Good JOb
    Keep writing..

    Stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes...if a mother can do that to her children...just walk out and never return...she is a byyaaatttccchhh!

    Send this one to Too Short...he'll let everyone know! LMFAO

    Sad sad story, yet a great write.

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-05-10 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      It's heartbreaking to read something like this. You said you do love your mom in the description, and I understand that, because the need and the longing for your mother will never really die. You can only stifle it deep inside. I am in no place to say this, really, but I am sure she had a reason to leave you all, not saying that she was right in doing so. Sometimes it's just the impulse that drives a mother...strange impulses... I do hope one day you finally manage to find out. At least you have your siblings...some kids end up alone out there without a single brother or sister... And I do sincerely hope you get through this, scarred as you might be at the end, it will only make you grow more.

    Anyway, that's really the only thing I have to write...once more i hope you make it through.

    "What doesn't kill you will only make you stronger."

    drika
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by silverdrika | [ Reply to This ]
      Your mother treats you horrible and puts herself before you or any of your siblings. You shouldn't let it get to you so much though. I like how you wrote this but you missed a few words. You haven't had the best life Flava but you need to see the good, and have a positive outlook on things. Love ya peace Mysteriou
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by Mysterious Blue | [ Reply to This ]
      I can realate in a way. My mom never left me, but at time, me and my brother had wished she would have. My mom is in a way mentaly ill. Ill in the way that she used to be a very abusive woman. It has gotten better but it's hard when the first memory I have of this new world is the one of her trying to drownd my brother. I had wished so much then that she would have just gotten up and left, but she didn't and in the long run I guess I'll be greatful. My nephew was born this past three months and I was scard to death because my brother and my sister-in-law had moved into out house. I was scard for my nephew's sake. I didn't want anything to happen to him. But things ended up getting a little better and then worse and now they're iffy. I think that my mom will eventually get better but not without medacation and a lot of help. But at the point in my life that I am in right now, in a way, I do wish she would have left. My dad deserves better than her but he loves her. When he would come home and hear her yelling, he would tell her to stop or he would call childservises. My dad to this day has never know what happening in out home for those many years, some day he will. My brother turned 20 on the 11 of this month, and my other brother turned 25 in October, but they can never forgive, forget or trust my mother again. So, if you can get what I"m saying by this, I do know what you mean, but not completely because I have never been in the position. I'm sorry you had to though.
    Things will get better.

    ~Mandie
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by Monkey | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel your anger in your writing. You have every right to be angry with her. It seems as though you are the oldest, and at 17 you are old enough to understand that the future of your sibblings depends upon you not upsetting them any more than they already are. Try letting them know that you are there for them, and father, uncles, aunts, cousins, etc. Try not to punish them or yourself any more. Sometimes adults do things that their children and sometimes other adults, just can't understand. If you want to talk PM me. I'm sorry if my comment sounds like a lecture - but if you want to talk let me know. Sometimes it helps to know that there is someone who cares. If I don't hear from you good luck to you. You'll get through this - someday.
    | Posted on 2005-04-18 00:00:00 | by Laura Lee | [ Reply to This ]
      I can relate to what you're saying there. My mom does the same thing. I didn't really see a scheme, but I guess that was more of a...way to get your anger out. Many people write poems about their mother, and it always brings out a sentimental side out of someone, but try writing something new. More description.

    You left all your kids
    Discarded us like thrash
    Why did you have us
    We would've been better off dead.

    You might of just mispelled trash, but that works really good anyway.
    | Posted on 2005-04-18 00:00:00 | by Blaith Hawthen | [ Reply to This ]


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