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Rebecca:untitled part 2

Author: Malcolm Bishop
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Rebecca:untitled part 2

A crowd formed around them in the rain,
Rebecca and Matthew felt no pain.
The driver of the truck got out to look,
his eyes were wide, his hands shook.
While the crowd looked on they could not see,
Rebecca and Matthew were now free.
They ascended a pillar of light,
transforming before the others sight.
Rebecca lost her earthly clothes,
they were replaced by silky blue robes.
As her mortality began to fade,
her eyes changed from black to jade.
Her hair regained its' midnight shade.
Matthew who was human through and through,
Received Gods' grace, his presence grew.
Matthew, who , once a priest,
told the story of Christs' last feast.
Matthew was of the greatest of souls,
a warrior he would make, to reach Gods' goals.
A war was coming.
Rebeccas' wings returned,
by her lords' grace, her eyes burned.
On her hip she felt a great heat,
she looked to her side, her sword in its' sheath.
She could hear the thunder of the oncoming dark forces,
she saw the generals' chariot pulled by four horses.

Submitted on 2005-04-19 02:45:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I absolutely loved your was beautifully told, and free flowing...i am curious did the story end?...were the two lovers or friends
| Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by tara lee | [ Reply to This ]
  Ah ha! A storyteller I see. This one sounds almost biblical. What I sense are two souls ascending to (heaven?), to fight a war, against the dark forces (Satan?). Matthew and Rebecca, warriors and angels, lovers perhaps, joining forces with the Lord to battle evil. A very interesting and large-scale concept. I'm sure many stories could be wrought from this premise. The poem itself left me wondering if I had missed a prequel, and after reviewing your list of submissions I believe this to be true. It took a second reading for me to realize that they had been struck down by the truck. At any rate, I enjoyed the poem, it seems to be leading to more adventures of Matthew and Rebecca.

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| Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by phil askew | [ Reply to This ]
  Yeah this one, and the first seem to be the best so far. The first one I actually thought that only mathew died. Well either way the story is now coming together piece by piece.
Phil's idea seems pretty close.
I am going to read the next to see if I can get a cocrete idea.
| Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by Brack-Attax | [ Reply to This ]

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