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    dots Submission Name: Oh Monkey Childdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsOh Monkey Childdots
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    Oh monkey child,
    uncover those baby blues,
    the time for evil has passed.
    Smash the noise of silence,
    and openly mouth your truths.
    The time has come
    to grow into yourself
    and into your inner wisdom.
    Seek out and sort your parts
    into a whole; become one.
    There is magic in your breath.
    Breathe wisely.
    The sounds you add to your breath
    can start a thousand wars
    or invoke peace in millions.
    Know your power and own your actions
    Know your brothers and share with your fractions.

    Oh monkey child,
    see no more evil
    hear no more evil,
    speak no more evil.
    Evil is vile,
    merely a veil of fear,
    Drop the veil and live in love.






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      wow, wasn't real sure what to expect here and surely came away with more than I bargained for, this truly runs deep...I love the part about "the sounds you add to your breath can start a thousand wars", so true the power the human tongue holds isn't it? also the monkey as metaphor for something incomplete is brilliant...for lack of anything better to say, how about this is really, really quite good and I am for sure adding it to my faves...liked it lots and lots

    Milo
    | Posted on 2005-12-04 00:00:00 | by Milo shanley | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I love this Kate. I surely didn't know what to expect and the surprise was a fine message. And some little monkey moving hands around him/herself. I like your message, because fear is what manifest all the uglies. Descartes did say, "I think, therefore, i am" and I believe so much more ability has been given us than this. "I think, therefore, I create my universe" is more fitting. Our thoughts have the power to manifest reality. Great job, it's good to read you too.
    peace and love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      I wasn't sure what this would be, but I like how you used the statues.

    Seek out and sort your parts
    into a whole; become one.
    There is magic in your breath.
    Breathe wisely.
    The sounds you add to your breath
    can start a thousand wars
    or invite peace in millions.
    Know your power and own your actions
    Know your brothers and share with your fractions

    That section is really pretty and profound. I like how you pretend it's about monkeys when it is really about human nature (Hey, we share a lot of DNA). I think the last three sentences work. I'm not too coherent today, sorry.
    | Posted on 2005-04-21 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      Well this is quite unusual. I like the message given. To know oneself, ones power, ones actions...and not live in fear. ..grow into wisdom, speak the truth. Well said.. and in an original way too I think.

    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting. I was expecting a goofy tribute to monkeys because of the title and it turned out to be much deeper than that. One thing though: you used the see no evil and speak no evil with the phrase

    uncover those baby blues,
    the time for evil has passed.
    Break the grasp of silence,
    mouth your truths.

    but where's the hear no evil? you could definately add that. The end brings it all together though the last three sentences are rather pointless and don't really add anything to the wholeness of the poem.
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by QuietDiscontent | [ Reply to This ]


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