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    dots Submission Name: workaholic bluesdots
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    Author: brokenbatman
    Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 475/233/44
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       make of this what you guys feel, my family is my life, they are to good for me but like the man who found the winning lottery ticket in a parking lot I will keep them as my own


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    dotsworkaholic bluesdots
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    days away at work have weakened
    the ability to soak up the constant need
    my three boys have to conquer all my attention
    days away at work have stolen
    precious moments of this day of freedom
    left my nerves in a weakened state
    days away at work have obliterated
    the time spent enforcing the life for my seeds
    left them to long for afternoons spent with daddy
    days away at work have forced me
    to take another look at myself for their sakes
    to reconstruct the moments we once had
    days away at work have awakened me
    put them behind me in the past for my family
    remember what is the reason the work is done
    days away at work will be counted
    till the next day here at home with the boys
    time to play play ball and go to the park
    days away at work are just a means to an end





    Submitted on 2004-04-03 23:23:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      at least you realize they need you .relax and enjoy the break. they are only kids for a short time then there gone. i like the way you worded this.
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by wildheart | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, I know how that is. I was working like a possessed lunatic recently, and now I'm working less. The days seem so long. Anyway, get some R&R. You deserve it.
    | Posted on 2004-04-04 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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