Door Mat

Author: painofthanatos Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 684 /571 /86 Words: 83

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Door Mat

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I greet you with my *Welcome* As you smear the shit from Your soul all over me I try and smile My surface is still strong It just doesn't look as Pretty anymore And in walks everyone else Trampling me I'm not really important I'm just here to keep Your insides looking Decent I look up admiringly Knowing someday I'll be strong enough To be the handle And one day Mabe I'll be able To lock you Out.

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creative play on an old cliché. you took it, molded it, and made it your own quite well. I particularly liked the bit about locking out those who have trampled you over the years. an inspiring piece

| Posted on 2005-05-15 00:00:00 | by cainboy | [ Reply to This ]

awkward, this is a lot like my life. i say this because i am fat, in band, and i am really geeky. and we all know where geeks are in society, lowest part of the food/popualtriy chain. So yeah you can say i eel this way a lot. THNX - Nammy

| Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by Namlooc20 | [ Reply to This ]

Yeah all the stuff Six and D&D and the rest have said ...I know how this feels for sure ...Usually its the one person ...Who re-walks on me ...I must I must go check out your other stuff...this was deliciously depressing ..And i like that ! :D Blessed Be

| Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]

Never thought I'd read a poem about a door mat and like it. You should correct the maybe instead of mabe though. Layer one: plain door mat. Layer two: a deep meaning referring to people who make our life easier and who we don't notice or even mistreat at times. Great message Nothing to say about the form it just sticks together.

| Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by babyblue002 | [ Reply to This ]

oooo im so honored that you created this because you were inspired by me. hurray! *shivers* i can't find anything to [censored] about because as i read it a second time, it makes even more sense and is even better to me. woo! nice! sophie

| Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by sudie | [ Reply to This ]

*opens door and looks at door mat* OH YOU POOR THING...I HAD NO IDEA! LMFAO This was interesting. There are many ways you could interpret this. That adds to the piece even more. BRAVO! Li Li

| Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]

D&D beat me too you! That tramp! (oh well- I still heart her) But, she said all the stuff I was going to say... Damn- not I’d just look lyke a copycatt... I need to think of new stuff... Maybe... how I missed you on here as of late and I’m glad to be reading your stuff and ... ...everything she said... Peace, love and crappy days- ~#6-

| Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]

*sigh* oh, how i can relate...this is a wonderfully sad little piece. this poem speaks volumes to me; it's as if you have painted my soul into a picture of words. great job, dearie. i think that since you have, once again, impressed me so, i shall add you to my submission stalk list. great write. keep it up, and i promise to keep reading! hugs and fingerlickings, ~*dark_and_dreary*~

| Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by dark_and_dreary | [ Reply to This ]

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