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    dots Submission Name: Liars and Thievesdots

    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Prose/Angry
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       A challanged answered. My friend Graem (wewak11) thought I would not be able to write a hate poem in my recent matrimonial state. OH WELL! i at least gave it a shot. He was probally right.

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    dotsLiars and Thievesdots

    One who lies
    Another, which steals
    Malcontents both
    The epitome of human waste

    A liar has no shame, a thief keeps no friend
    As a parasite of life they flourish
    Lonely is he who knows no remorse
    To exist as an amoebic cancerous cell
    Waiting to latch unto a fertile host

    Denial of faith, denouncer of kindness
    A predator, a scavenger, a dumpster diver
    Honest work is oxymoronic to them
    Protection of innocence is forgone

    The kindest reaction to this lot
    Is simply to feign their existence
    However, when they strike is then
    Camouflaged emotions and sympathies

    For myself I will have none of that
    Once burned, forever remembered
    To see them waste in their cesspool
    Of despise and self pity is payment enough

    Submitted on 2005-04-19 13:02:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Dave, this nearly won the challenge, I liked:"an amoebic cancerous cell" that's got a lot of venom in it, but, although I really liked the poem itself, Great! from the challenge point of view, you should have burned 'em all in the fires of Hell YOURSELF in the last verse not just be content to see 'em perish to get me. I'll try it now and you decide.
    Be Happy Now
    Hi, Cleo
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... i really like it... it surprised me... good job.. my favorite part was 'A liar has no shame, a thief keeps no friend'

    great job

    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by anita_89 | [ Reply to This ]
      I am not sure if this would be a hate poem. More of a ...ummmmm... like hypro said...venting poem. When you hate someone you gotta be like...A liar and a thief, bust in my house and you will not leave. I have 10 dogs that will put a hole in your sleave. I dare you to look me in my eyes and decieve...

    Yeah yeah...that's a good hate type thingy going on there. Yup shoooorrreee is. yessiree bob! LOL

    But, the poem itself, putting aside the hate thing...great. I'd stick to the power of love and vent off that if it were me. You can hate more then once...Love...that's the most powerful emotion of all and it doesn't come around quite as often.

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, you got the lack of good flow that I usually read in hate poems down. I didnt really feel a lot of hate in this...seemed more like venting...like you were in the cesspool and are writing this from the top of the rock that over looks the pool saying, "Na-na-na-na-naaaa-naaaaaaaaa, you cant get meeeeee"...maybe if you throw in something about wanting to die or wanting to kill...??? I dunno, its hard to write about hate when you are in a state of love, huh? Graeme is always throwing out those challenges...hee-hee. Have a good one and keep writin'
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]

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