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Author: hybridmagnolia
ASL Info:    19/male
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Words: 379
Class/Type: Lyrics /Longing
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short song. basically, it hit me while reading my sonnets listening to Lux Aeterna off the Requiem for a Dream soundtrack. after all, what is music but poetry in motion?


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No love could ever be greater than this
In all the years that have passed human time
Being near you brings me eternal bliss
I have never felt so true, pure, divine
Yet still, I know that you cannot be mine
Life continues to not let me feel love
Though I may never love, I know I’ll never find
Another angel like you, from above
Innocent and graceful as a young dove
Oh, how I rue, how I loathe that grand day
You haunt me now; you’re all I ever dream of
What could have been love is now my dismay
I guess that I was just damn too blind to see
I can never feel love, there’s no love for me

I don’t know why I feel
The way that I do
Or why I feel what I feel for you
And it may seem real
But I know there’s no way
That these feelings could ever be true
I don’t know why I lie
To myself and I
Don’t know what I’d ever do
If I could hold you close
In my arms at night
And spend eternity with you

I stay up late and I contemplate why
You would want to leave me alone like this
In this solitude confinement, I cry
Over memories I’ll forever miss
Memories of love, of passion, of bliss
Are now slowly starting to fade away
To hold you once more is all that I wish
But now I have watch you walk away
And so, your contempt is now my dismay
I still wonder how this could be
Our love is broken; it’s too late to say
I’m sorry this is how it has to be
The love letters that I wasted on you
Show how much I was wrong, and never knew

I don’t know why I feel
The way that I do
Or why I feel what I feel for you
And it may seem real
But I know there’s no way
That these feelings could ever be true
I don’t know why I lie
To myself and I
Don’t know what I’d ever do
If I could hold you close
In my arms at night
And spend eternity with you




Submitted on 2005-04-19 15:12:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Yea I can relate to this but like Ben said it is something that has een beaten to death over again. Try some orginality and use some different words that describe your feelings a little more vivid. Then it would a lot better. It was still touching tho. ~~Donna~~
| Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by ThatWasOnceMe | [ Reply to This ]
  I can feel the emotion in this piece. However, every stanza is either a cliché' or been beaten to death. The passion is there but the originality is not. Please take this constructivelly and not as a disrespectfull remark.
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ben
| Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]


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