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    dots Submission Name: Dear Mr. Presidentdots
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    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Rant/Serious
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    Description:
       Another stab at a hate poem for Graem. This time from a child's prospective.


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    dotsDear Mr. Presidentdots
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    Dear Mr. Pesident;

    Everyday I watch the news, read the paper
    All is see and read is hate
    Hateful people, and people who hurt others
    Can't you like put them in jail or something?
    I Hate Them

    People killing other people
    Animals getting hurt by meanies
    Pollution in the air and water
    Children like me afraid to play outside
    Why can't you stop it?
    I Hate Them

    My friend's daddy can't find a job
    No one will pay him for work
    My mommie has 4 "uncles"
    And they SLEEP in her bed
    Can you help me?
    I Hate Them

    My friend an me went fishing the other day
    A mean man said we had to leave
    Something about his lawyer said so
    Or he would take my house
    Will you please talk to him?
    I Hate Them

    My teacher calls us "young people"
    She never talks to just me
    It seems we are all one kind
    But my best friend is different than me
    What is Political Correctness?
    I Hate Them

    I wanted to say grace at lunch
    But the lunchroom lady said I couldn't
    Something about offending others who don't know God
    But my preacher tells me differant
    Don't you believe in God?
    I Hate Them

    It's time for me to go to bed now
    I wish you would make everything right
    Living afraid and not being able to talk free
    Thats not fun right now
    Are you listening to me?
    I Don't want to Hate anymore






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      that's really good, it gave me something to think about...All the hate today, i sat down and wrote a poem the other day about the issues today, and I haven't posted it yet still in editing stage...anyway, great write, it gave me soemthing to think about.
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by camoflage | [ Reply to This ]
      <@> just HATE that this is what people have come 2 in society and as your piece alludes 2; WHAT DA HECK IZ GOIN ON UP IN HERE??
    I remeber being a child, heck <!> still am "1", & "ITZ" not about being scared...still "i" don't lock my doorz nor cower in fear & "i've" been 'round the world & back again...never A SCARED!
    I appreciate you taking the challenge & as always challenger & challengee r way more up 2 par! Love, Peace, Joy & continued blessings 2 you and your family! LOVE, Live, LAUGH!
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Sometimes I feel like ranting about these sorts of problems too. Hate always comes from a love for something else. People hate murderers becuase they love life. I like what you did with this. It really makes the reader think.




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    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so awesome. I liek it so much. Like munchie said unique. I really never read anthing liek this. I like the last stanza the best. It puts it all together. Yah know what all of this is true though and it is really sad to see all of this going on. I aplade you for writting something like this. Wonderful!!!

    Much love
    mikki
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was unique. But coming from you...expected. This was awesome. I would send this for real. Just somewhere in there you need to mention something about the gas prices...it would be cheaper to fill the tank with Hennesee. LMFAO

    Great write.

    Alicia
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Dave, please accept this golden goblet as your trophy for winning the coveted Wewak Challenge Award. Simply awesome, I never would have thought of a kid's viewpoint!
    I AM impressed
    Now, return to your constant cheezy love-struck happy stuff...LOL
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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