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    dots Submission Name: Moneydots
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    Author: Katj
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 103/89/24
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       I make much money, and I waste it all the time.


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    dotsMoneydots
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    My cash flow is drying up,
    Too much spent on mindless items
    Which will never serve a purpose
    Past my initial ten minutes of interest.

    All the money I waste
    Could feed the hungry
    For years.
    Am I proud?

    But not ashamed enough
    To stop me from wasting it
    The very next opportunity I get
    Iíll find something my impulses need-
    Something I canít live without.

    What is my problem?
    Tied to material objects
    And striving to come up with
    Everything the media says I need.




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      Money? the necessity evil. Though, this is not my style of poem, i kind of liked it with the money concept behind it. :)

    "What is my problem?
    Tied to material objects
    And striving to come up with
    Everything the media says I need. "..good one!
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
      Three cheers for Capitali$m. RAH! RAH! RAH! Anyhow, that's the world we live in $ome people love it $ome people hate it ($hrug) whatcha gonna do. In life, it'$ alway$ a battle between the have$ and the have not$. This happen$ even in nature. (another cheer for Darwini$m) or $omething. Anyway$ pretty good poem, easy to read, nice flow.

    ye-haw

    $tw
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very well done. I get the same way too, but I dont feel I am being forced to spend my money because of materialistic things...I just use it for gas to go somewhere on the weekend...fun stuff. Then I look around my house and I am able to smile...because everything in it was pretty much done out of love. Love from another, love for myself...love that makes this place a home...and thats what money is for, to help you realize just how good you have it when you dont have it, ya know?

    Anyway, nice piece of writin' here. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      being retardedly poor for a span of your life time will cure this over need for material things that your realy may not need. there is a balance between actual materialism and just living comfortable, but the line is realy thin and easy to cross.

    What is my problem?
    Tied to material objects
    And striving to come up with
    Everything the media says I need.

    this should be the slogan for the american populas. i like the poem though and i think it is well writen. take care and focus on soul more than body...if you dont already... =d
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]


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