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Author: kittycampbel
ASL Info:    23 male uganda
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Words: 72
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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just thats wat's inside. what do you think?


Lost in the world all alone
No one to talk to,No one to listen
Wish you could talk to me
You think am too absorbed to listen?
But am always there for you
Dont replace with someone else
Dont think I cant listen
I LOVE U,make the best of everything I say
Pray another moment ,I will be there!
Dont think I dont care am there always
And am listening.

Submitted on 2005-04-20 13:09:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Tender as the heart that wrote it I'm guessing.
Soft like an angels kiss...with easy words to fall into.
Very gentle...I like the powerful undertone of praise...for your Lord???


Good write and thanks for sharing,
| Posted on 2005-06-01 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
  This is lovely, written with deep feeling, spoken by a true friend. We all need to try and be better listeners, more caring. Anyone would be blessed to have such a friend as you have described here in this poem. Very well said. I enjoyed reading this.
Your friend,
| Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  This was a deep piece as was the last one that I read. It seems that you are going through some inner emotional battles. As though you are not very happy right now. That's sad. I am sorry to hear so much pain and sorrow. Someone is always going to be there to listen. If you need me to, I am hear. I'm a good listener.

Great work here. I felt sooo much from it. At one point in my life I could relate.

Again, I am here.

Li Li
| Posted on 2005-04-21 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked it except you forgot some *I*s before the *am*s...
It's a very powerful piece with a very strong message. Maybe you should consider sharing it with those you wrote it for...Just a suggestion though
Keep Writing
| Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]

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