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SUICIDE OF THOUGHT


Author: kittycampbel
ASL Info:    23 male uganda
Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 53 /72 /25
Words: 132
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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just so strong questions in the mind,just trying
moments in life giving resolutions,are they good for me people? could they be emulated? Do they move you?


SUICIDE OF THOUGHT



I wish I could go away ,just fly
If Others dont care,then why should I?
Sometimes I hold the trigger,I want to pull it
And Die!
I have tried all things
I looked up to God but no answer
I worked hard to forget,Ignoring everyones habits
And then I hear a voice it says
"I know things may be so hard but just believe in God, be fair to your friends and to yourself"
Just when I open my eyes, I see.....
Even if everyone takes everything,
I'm going to give everthing to make someone
know I care.
What ever my emotions say,
I have learned self confidence and have learned
It gives you a Big audience
And am strong whatever I could do! I will do.

KC(SAMMY)
kittycampbel@yahoo.com




Submitted on 2005-04-20 13:59:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this,
is regretful you take an important subject and make is boring and cliché, i dont like this...you put nothing new into the world with this...

but that just me..
flipside
milo :)
| Posted on 2005-04-22 00:00:00 | by milo stills | [ Reply to This ]
  KC, you bring your thoughts out in your poems, and never hold back, reading your stuff is like listening to a confessional, and I never get tired of listening to it.
I liked this, the little rhyme at the start, lack of faith in the middle, and the confidence in the finish.
Nice stuff!

Be Happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  God never presents you with something you can't handle. Even when it feels like he is not listening...He's actually making you find the strength He knows you have. When he sees that you can truly not accomplish something, he will step in and fulfill his roll as a Father. In the meantime...always keep your head up. Keep striving...keep breathing...and always believe in yourself.


This poem was full of expression. Very deep and very emotional.


Li Li
| Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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