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    Author: Angel McCalmon
    ASL Info:    20/f/cherpt nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 43/43/19
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    so simple
    so beautifull
    so great
    oh so eyecatching is the smile on your face,
    a smile that should not be tarnished by trapped tears, hidden fears, submissions of defeat, nothing should take that smile's strong luster away.

    So deep
    are your eyes, the way they look at me from miles away,
    hard to escape their interrogation,
    its just a temptation that's there making me want to look eventhough i know it is forbidden, still the depth that reaveals itself through the story told by your eyes is to fierce to escape.

    So tender
    easily grasped the hand that guided me through unthreaded grounds, a new road they took me upon your hands,
    which explored my body my mind my lips my every little untold and baren secret uncoverd and fortold by you

    your lips i wish to experience and once i do the next phrase i say will be or should be simply deliscous to touch and taste,
    just like a cloud in my mouth.

    Submitted on 2005-04-20 14:02:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      alluring, yet less than too provocative. sensual and good imagery, it creates a wonderful picture. you closely tie your feelings and thoughts into one, not always the easiest thing to do, but done well, take care
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this poem
    it is soft spoken yet attacks from an outspoken angle
    my thoughts here are clear enough so that everyone can understand
    | Posted on 2005-04-21 00:00:00 | by Angel McCalmon | [ Reply to This ]

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