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    dots Submission Name: HEIR, TAKE MY PLACEdots
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    Author: Desser
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 89/95/44
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 305
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    dotsHEIR, TAKE MY PLACEdots
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    An heir means nothing to me,
    But there's always a posibility.
    I fight, leap, dodge, and hide,
    Risking my life daily.
    Should I slow down?

    I can't trust myself not to,
    I can't trust myself to go on.
    Do I need a second me?

    The threats are spreading,
    Day by day, minute by minute,
    I fall deeper into my well.
    Where have all my combatants gone?

    I must stay alive or die trying,
    But will another take my place.
    Noone will, noone is brave enough.
    Not even I am brave enough.
    My body fights the evil, while
    My mind fights my body.

    I need an heir.
    I won't live long enough,
    Not to keep the fight from dying.
    Heir, take my place.




    Submitted on 2005-04-20 14:40:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Woah, it's definitely an interesting poem.
    It makes me think of a warrior king of the past, struggling to survive, unwilling to settle down, yet knowing he has a responsibility to further his line. It seems more suited to a role play of the past then these present times, but I guess that most of us are still fighting our own battles though our weapons may not be swords. Do you really need an heir...heheh, I'm sure you could find someone who is willing to give you one...jks :)

    Only one thing: is "noone" a word? Shouldn't it be two words... whatever, English is an ever changing language, maybe it changed while I wasn't looking.
    ...
    ciao

    Penny
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by barefootangel | [ Reply to This ]
      very interesting.you're wording is like i wrote this.i dont want the second me i have lol
    probably not the way you ment it but anyways
    wes all toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]



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