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False Lust

Author: Chicool2
ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania
Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266 /260 /60
Words: 267
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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All true.... I know it may be long but please read the whole things, becayse you may leave out some details in not doing so...

False Lust

I hid in the shadows
Until the words exorted
And I couldn't
Hide anymore

I waited for the response
The one that replicates my own
But no words came out
Not a word existed in that mind of yours
And I felt alone
Utterly alone

Then I hear the other news
The one of you having found someone
Someone who wasn't me
And I cried once more
The tears an uncontrollable river

For 5 months I have waited for anything
Just the tiniest hint
And besides those pointlesss calls
Those two unforgettable kisses
Where we connected for more than a moment
I felt something real
Because our lips may have been tied with fate

But the fantasy was nonexistent
For it DID happen
But you had still been entwined with your other
And for that I cried once more

And now, yet again
I wait for nothing
An empty heartless soul that you have
I know it's too black to understand
The consequences of our actions
For everyday

I am called a whore
I am called a slut
I laugh with people about jokes that are cruel
In doing so, making fun of myself
I am called so many cruel sick things
That I just can't take it
And I find that tool
The one with the blade
And it seems to be my outlet

For that was false lust
And you may just come one day to realize
That I take the blame for it all
And you,
You go on with your normal life...

Submitted on 2005-04-20 14:45:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ppl are cruel out of jealousy. just remember that part* if you think about it, ppl that make fun of you are usually ppl that will never get the oportunities you do. they feel better by making you feel worse, so hold your hear up and make sure they see you don't care what they say. as long as you are happy with your decisions it doesn't matter if they are. this was a fantastic piece and the emotions can not be faked. well done honey** hang in there, it'll get better

| Posted on 2005-04-21 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey hun...don't let anyone put you down. They will get theirs one day. They are just jealous of you. Amy you are a great person, don't let anyone tell you different. Don't forget i'll always be here for you too.

This was a great poem. You did a great job with letting your feelings just pour out of the pen. This was so emotional. Keep on writting and I will keep on reading them.

Remember...Don't let anyone hurt you no matter who it is.

Much love to ya,
| Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh is really awful sometimes being female. You can't do anything without being ridiculed or humiliated. Sad to's always been that way and probably always will. All I can say...whoever says these things of you...ignore them and always be satisfied with yourself and your choices. You live your own life. Others are nosy and disrespectful mostly to get attention. Screw em.

Keep your head up and always smile. Even when no one smiles back.

Li Li
| Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]

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