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    dots Submission Name: False Lustdots
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    Author: Chicool2
    ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266/260/60
    Words: 267
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 924
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       All true.... I know it may be long but please read the whole things, becayse you may leave out some details in not doing so...


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    dotsFalse Lustdots
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    I hid in the shadows
    Until the words exorted
    And I couldn't
    Hide anymore

    I waited for the response
    The one that replicates my own
    But no words came out
    Not a word existed in that mind of yours
    And I felt alone
    Utterly alone

    Then I hear the other news
    The one of you having found someone
    Someone who wasn't me
    And I cried once more
    The tears an uncontrollable river

    For 5 months I have waited for anything
    Just the tiniest hint
    And besides those pointlesss calls
    Those two unforgettable kisses
    Where we connected for more than a moment
    I felt something real
    Because our lips may have been tied with fate

    But the fantasy was nonexistent
    For it DID happen
    But you had still been entwined with your other
    And for that I cried once more

    And now, yet again
    I wait for nothing
    An empty heartless soul that you have
    I know it's too black to understand
    The consequences of our actions
    For everyday

    I am called a whore
    I am called a slut
    I laugh with people about jokes that are cruel
    In doing so, making fun of myself
    I am called so many cruel sick things
    That I just can't take it
    And I find that tool
    The one with the blade
    And it seems to be my outlet

    For that was false lust
    And you may just come one day to realize
    That I take the blame for it all
    And you,
    You go on with your normal life...




    Submitted on 2005-04-20 14:45:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ppl are cruel out of jealousy. just remember that part* if you think about it, ppl that make fun of you are usually ppl that will never get the oportunities you do. they feel better by making you feel worse, so hold your hear up and make sure they see you don't care what they say. as long as you are happy with your decisions it doesn't matter if they are. this was a fantastic piece and the emotions can not be faked. well done honey** hang in there, it'll get better

    Jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-04-21 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey hun...don't let anyone put you down. They will get theirs one day. They are just jealous of you. Amy you are a great person, don't let anyone tell you different. Don't forget i'll always be here for you too.

    This was a great poem. You did a great job with letting your feelings just pour out of the pen. This was so emotional. Keep on writting and I will keep on reading them.

    Remember...Don't let anyone hurt you no matter who it is.

    Much love to ya,
    Mikki
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh honey...it is really awful sometimes being female. You can't do anything without being ridiculed or humiliated. Sad to say...it's always been that way and probably always will. All I can say...whoever says these things of you...ignore them and always be satisfied with yourself and your choices. You live your own life. Others are nosy and disrespectful mostly to get attention. Screw em.

    Keep your head up and always smile. Even when no one smiles back.

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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