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    dots Submission Name: HE KILLED HIS TRUSTdots
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    Author: Desser
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 89/95/44
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 356
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    Description:
       A poem to my father...


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    dotsHE KILLED HIS TRUSTdots
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    Pathetic in every way.
    Drama queen, or rather king
    Wanting all eyes watching him,
    Just to torcher his own life.

    His way or no way,
    What else is new;
    Unfair to him is a crime,
    Unfair to you is a pleasure.

    Let him take the treasure,
    Off to go kill himself,
    For what reason,
    Noone will ever know.

    Years of patience for his cure,
    Forget it! I'm through with waiting.
    He's committed to himself and not his life.
    Look at his big, black eyes.

    I don't blame myself,
    Hell no! It's all on him
    And his sick ways,
    Killing memories and intelligence.

    If only I can remember;
    Do I want to remember?
    Remember when he was real,
    When he could be trusted.
    I can no longer try.

    The cover-ups, schemes, the madman,
    All on the inside.
    They can't fool me anymore.
    They only fool himself.

    "To you, my dear father:
    Where have you gone?"
    He's brain-dead.
    He's lost to the addiction.




    Submitted on 2005-04-20 15:07:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      if this poem is truly unbiased,my sympathy you have.no parent should be a motivation like this,i wish he would read this.the feelings come out in youre words,i do not know these type of feelings towards a parent,have not be in an even remote similarity,but this piece truly saddens,as this piece was intended to do
    good job

    remember wes all toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW ! THIS POEM WAS VERY SELF ERESSED.
    YOU DESCRIBED ALOT OF VIVID DETAILS AND HAD A GOOD POINT OF VIEW FOR THE READER TO RELATE. IT WAS WELL ORGANIZED AND SHOWED BOUNTIFUL EFFORT. IT WAS 90% GOOD. WOW !
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by J-IDENTITY | [ Reply to This ]



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